I need a tiltle for this poem

[Bleeze]

Can you guys help me out with title for this one.


After all of the joys and pains
And lessons learned through out the game
I maintain and manage
To live my life the same
I chose my own path
I take the blame
A prisoner of the world
Entrapped like grains of sand
This was the life they gave us
I’m just playing my hand
Forgive those that are clueless
For they don’t understand
The glory of love
MY LOVE IS WEALTHY
It’s hard to keep up and still love yourself
The agony of defeat is all I felt
The poker face is the only residue
From the cards I was dealt
Drunk off of sorrows
Tipsy from all the opportunities that missed me
Feeling like im out on a ledge
Trying to focus on the pledge
A full fledge brain wave
Engraved in the stone
Are the last words that this soul recited in a poem

[Brown_Pride]

Originally Posted by Bleeze

Can you guys help me out with title for this one.



The agony of defeat is all I felt
The poker face is the only residue
From the cards I was dealt

i don't know why but i really really liked this part.

[I-Hate-You]

Originally Posted by Brown_Pride

i don't know why but i really really liked this part.

yeah, that part caught me too

I'm clueless on a title

good work though

[Bleeze]

thanks

[rudboi]

This was heavy.
Heavy n full off hope! :smile:

Mebbe u could call it untitled pain?
Or jus untitled?

[Bleeze]

good looks

[Bleeze]

i STILLL Need A TITLE , HOLLA AT ME

[ONE_MIC_ETERNAL]

Its a good Poem. You could try jumbling
around with it. Mix more emotion with it
maybe shorten a few things.

for example-

This was the life they gave us
I’m just playing my hand
Forgive those that are clueless
For they don’t understand

This could be a bit more street direct
you could work it a bit forward and
have less words

example-

This is the life I am
there just playing my hand
those that are clueless
they don’t understand


On the real, I think "Dealt" would be a good title.








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[Bleeze]

Yo Im feeling you.

Thats whats up im feeling your title and the word play Holla

[FaZedONE]

That poem is closer to me then my jugular vein like allah.

[Bleeze]

Peace.
Iam glad you can relate

Check ou some of my other ones

[FaZedONE]

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