A Quick One

[GenoRyme]

yo...


i'm trapped in a zone, standin' still when action arose
stumblin', and mumblin' tryna capture the doe
i died that day with a punctured lung, a whole to the head
saw my life past by, to my momma moanin' in bed
i was born in 85 on Feburary 1st
death stayed on my mind, seems like a very scary curse
i'm thinkin' i'm crazy, but it's hereditary says a nurse
but i'm feelin' quite shifty and the devil will emerge
my childhood was lonesome until i was 5
my parents had my sister now a terrible sight
she was raped when she was 13 now I'm out on the grind
lookin' for this muthaf*cka, walkin' out with a 9
is was my pops, but he wanted it to be a cops matter
but i'm lookin' for this niga ready to leave his jaw shattered
cause my hearts shattered to peices, my homies would come thru
to take my mind off it, they'd smoke me out or pass me a brew
but my niga Brian, was always callin' everyday
askin' me about how i felt, yo, i thought he was pretty gay
but i had a gut feelin', that he was involved
my veins was pumpin' heat, just thinkin' if he was involved
his life better get jesus involved, startin' hittin' the church
cause if i find you, i'mma set you up with a visit to the nurse
because of this gut feelin' i went and asked the cops whut they found
they said they sombody's hat on the ground
so i wsaw what type it was, it was a hawks retro
i thought back to where i saw it before and then presto
i remember i went to the mall, and brian's boy Pesto
copped that joint, so i told my pops let's go
i know who did it, it was that Pesto *****
he was talkin' bout it would look dope with his fresh new kicks
the black and red air force 2's low top
i went and grabbed my dad's knap sack and took out chrome the glock
went to his block, and they all greeted me
told them i had to stop thikin bout my sister, they agreed with me
pulled out the hawks hat, you Pesto holla at me
put my hand on my waist i had the the glock in my palms back reach
told him, i know you did it, and he said did what
i said you raped my sister, he was like that slut
she was all on my ****, she wanted it yo
remember when we was at the mall, she wa

[W.I.Z.E.]

First off you need to finish this ****. Second off...this is FIYYAAAH!!! Straigh ill kid. You have such passion whenever you write and this story was full of that passion. I didn't even get mad when you used "involved" like 20 times in two lines cuz it seemed raw and real. Also, the way you painted the picture was nice.

That "pretty gay" line had me dying for some reason. The only other issue I had wuz you sendin' homeboy to the "nurse" did you mean "hearse"?

Great verse regardless.

[GenoRyme]

damn....up