Just another waste

[Mukel]

To abstain from sin is to obtain the blessing,
convelesing, raised voices got me stressing,
people cry for attention and attention is gained,
distract your peers so they drift off course,
of course you dont agree to a certain degree,
i dont either, but i keep intercepting like a wide reciever,
the mothers a griever, she wouldnt believe ya,
saw a sign from god so now she's a believer,
deliver the promise, yet you destroy a whole province,
a novice to the game, the soliders are slain,
why you act with your brawn and never your brain,
its a strain to me but it aint to you,
objects are worthless, and your rent is due,
so you go get your gun or knife or your ratchet,
go fix a plot and you try to hatch it,
then the plot backfires and the story thickens,
now your in a cell writing notes like charles dickens

[dasoloist]

To abstain from sin is to obtain the blessing,
convelesing, raised voices got me stressing,
people cry for attention and attention is gained,
distract your peers so they drift off course,
of course you dont agree to a certain degree,
i dont either, but i keep intercepting like a wide reciever,
the mothers a griever, she wouldnt believe ya,
saw a sign from god so now she's a believer,
deliver the promise, yet you destroy a whole province,
a novice to the game, the soliders are slain,
why you act with your brawn and never your brain,
its a strain to me but it aint to you,
objects are worthless, and your rent is due,
so you go get your gun or knife or your ratchet,
go fix a plot and you try to hatch it,
then the plot backfires and the story thickens,
now your in a cell writing notes like charles dickens

:thumbsdow What is this?! you're trying too hard!

[Mukel]

I tried to hard? It took me 2 minutes to write that!

Mad at me cos you cant ride a bike, f*gott, you gotta get back on and keep trying, dont be mad all your life.

[Cali_Bud]

I tried to hard? It took me 2 minutes to write that!
Mad at me cos you cant ride a bike, f*gott, you gotta get back on and keep trying, dont be mad all your life.
Mukel what u mad for??? Let the n!gga talk and keep working on it. This wasn't nearly as bad as some of the other things I've seen you write lol. This is more for audio. You have to think outside of the box when your writing. We can't hear or see you so make us feel the emotion and throw some better word play in. You'll be alright. Check my first post in here. I sucked!! lol but I kept working at it and got better. Just work on it and stop posting freestyles cause that ain't what people wanna see in here. They want writtens. Take your time and give em writtens. You don't have to drop in here every two days. Try a song a week or something

[Ecliptik]

:thumbsdow What is this?! you're trying too hard!

damn....even i didn't think it was that bad...and i can be pretty brutal...lol

[theman080]

It wasnt that bad....never take random feed from some random dude too serious...

[rajakaya]

Oh man...you're trying too hard!

[W.I.Z.E.]

i dont either, but i keep intercepting like a wide reciever,


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objects are worthless, and your rent is due,



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