Living to die

[Mukel]

Im holding on to life on to little of what remains,
my body weight decayed as i lay here in pain,
questioning my support or my sanity, am i sane?
colour faded a shade of what i was,
all i'll be remembered as is another loss,
a boss i wish i was but im a sheep like the rest,
we took chances with life but I failed the test,
clutchin my chest, destined for the graveside,
my wife in view at my bed side, my pain i confide,
close my eyes as i see her tears stream down,
try to make her smile cos i like to be a clown,
but its all a front as the illness takes the beat,
standing tall, weak and shaking as i stand to my feet,
the thought of my death makes my love ones weep,
heartbeats weak breathless as i lay my head to sleep,
eternilly in yours arms with god may i rest in piece.

[ILL_FAM]

yeah i like the start of this but i kinda get the feeling it fell off a bit or maybe its because im tiered either way it wasn't so bad.....

Im holding on to life on to little of what remains,
my body weight decayed as i lay here in pain,
questioning my support or my sanity, am i sane?
colour faded a shade of what i was,

i liked this

....i say it wasn't bad because i feel you style its like your pouring your emotions out or some **** i think that you should do an emotional piece like something ****ed up in your life or some **** that i think would be definitely kool.

:thumbsup::unsure::ucku: lol

I= :king:

[ILL_FAM]

i also like this

but its all a front as the illness takes the beat,
standing tall, weak and shaking as i stand to my feet,
the thought of my death makes my love ones weep,

:thumbsup:

[Neo Regular]

it's dope.

the dude's just a flip-floppin hater who can't give credit/respect where it's due.

[MaCRonI]

u came correct on this joint,...awesome content for your short and consise bars....kudos on this!!!!

7.6/10