Life

[Sweet Tooth]

Life is hard
It'll give you scars

Life is nice
It'll give you light

Life is rough
It'll beat you up

Life is great
It'll eventually go your way

Life is difficult
It'll get dirty like a mixing bowl

Life is amazing
It'll let you take weed and start blazing

Life is exhausting
It'll leave you confused without any causing

Life is wonderful
It'll give you the chance to have your buttons pulled

Life is stressful
It'll be blurry on how to accomplish your next goal

Life is blessing
It'll let you call yourself the sex king

Life is life
It's what you make it, dark or bright

[Sweet Tooth]

NO feed back? **** YALL.

[Thee One]

I like the concept but don't really feel the execution. Sorry...it just doesn't 'flow' to me and without the flow I don't feel involved or attached enough.

If I might take your concept and expand it a bit...

Life...

Life is hard
watchin' cats eat while I starve
no money no shoes
stealing bus rides ice grillin' cars

Life can be nice
my little girl's smile better than ice
better than gold
I struggle to make sure she won't when she's old

Life is rough
Even still I can't get enough
Though I complain about the lack of certainty
I still pray that I can live an eternity

Life...

Tell me a story, you give me several thesis statements with no supporting arguments. Draw me in and I'll never leave, as it stands you just stand on the otherside of a window with nothing in it hoping I'll continue to marvel at my own reflection forever.

Not trying to be harsh but helpful...hope you don't take it the wrong way

[Sweet Tooth]

I like the concept but don't really feel the execution. Sorry...it just doesn't 'flow' to me and without the flow I don't feel involved or attached enough.
If I might take your concept and expand it a bit...
Life...
Life is hard
watchin' cats eat while I starve
no money no shoes
stealing bus rides ice grillin' cars
Life can be nice
my little girl's smile better than ice
better than gold
I struggle to make sure she won't when she's old
Life is rough
Even still I can't get enough
Though I complain about the lack of certainty
I still pray that I can live an eternity
Life...
Tell me a story, you give me several thesis statements with no supporting arguments. Draw me in and I'll never leave, as it stands you just stand on the otherside of a window with nothing in it hoping I'll continue to marvel at my own reflection forever.
Not trying to be harsh but helpful...hope you don't take it the wrong way


:ohmy:

[Thee One]

:ohmy:

I hope I didn't offend, just trying to help you expand.

[Absolut da poet]

lol..

[Absolut da poet]

as your last breath..
Life can...
be the coolest pressure you'll ever feel.....see...
...it'll..
make you take back what was granted...
laughing...fffree..
in the time you take for granted passing through the tiears..
you'll be...
weeping.. in and out of consciousness over years..
for the lifffe..
....in your eyes..
..
for the right to write it or just to make it alright..

...you'd be surprised.

[Thee One]

as your last breath..
Life can...
be the coolest pressure you'll ever feel.....see...
...it'll..
make you take back what was granted...
laughing...fffree..
in the time you take for granted passing through the tears..
you'll be...
weeping.. in and out of consciousness over years..
for you lifffe..
....
..
for the right to write it or just to make it alright..
...


Very Nice! Well said :yes:

[Absolut da poet]

Very Nice! Well said :yes:
thanks..

[Sweet Tooth]

I hope I didn't offend, just trying to help you expand.
thanks :yes: