i need some feedback

[blackwaterpark]

i know yall are good at finding flaws.so hook me up with some feedback.

http://www.zshare.net/audio/45859258b61471/

[Choc City]

I checked it out. The sample is tight. I would put a short delay at the end though or a verb with a short tail so the cut off isnt so harsh.

The mix isnt that great the drums are terrible! The pattern is cool, you just need some better drum sounds. If you throw delay or verb on that sample and replace the cheap sounding drums you'll have the groundwork of a banger! After that you might consider adding some other instrumentation so make it a little more interesting.

Its def a good start, keep doing ya thing man!