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#1rapper
10-29-07, 04:57 PM
How did i let this happen, how are u dying and im survivin, this ain't right
All because some f@ggot got mad, sprayed at me and can't aim right
It was late night we were all being stupid and i had to open my mouth
Told the wrong dude something foul, and he pulled to let out
About six shots hit you..yep six shots he split as soon as his clipped droped
You flopped against the car and spilled the beer you were holding
First time in my life i saw the fear in a soldier..now were home and its gettin colder
Cant take you to the hospital because its possible ill get arrested
I swear though if you die ill be the one to avenge it..you died for our friendship
I swear ill do the same, you voice is weak but you speak and start sayin my name
I say be quiet and tighten my grip on your hand tryin to mask your pain
Your blood has my shirt stained..and your breathing is frantic
You start to panick, im flippin..screaming trying to manage
My hand is reaching for bandage but all of a sudden i understand it
Its too late you left for a date with fate...all im feelin is hate
Tears stream down my face, i cover my head
Sobbing thinking my brother is dead, why not me instead
I put you in bed, cover your face..look up in space..and say its all wrong
Your at heavens gate playing life goes on..your bullet wounds are gone
But down here im singin a differnt song, thinkin of the pu$$y who shot you
Holding my glock swearing ill hit him worse then he got you...
I got you....

Sicilian Spit
10-29-07, 06:23 PM
Good story. So-so flow. Some deep sh*t if it really did happen, otherwise just some creative sh*t.

#1rapper
10-29-07, 06:55 PM
yeah im tryin to develop better..so i sacrificed flow for content..appreciate the feedback

theman080
10-29-07, 10:50 PM
Dope ****, story line was hot and the sacraficed flow was well worth it. It wasnt overly complex or anything but it got the point across and hit the mark.


Dope.

#1rapper
10-29-07, 11:20 PM
Dope ****, story line was hot and the sacraficed flow was well worth it. It wasnt overly complex or anything but it got the point across and hit the mark.
Dope.

good looks man..appreciate it

Cali_Bud
10-31-07, 09:47 AM
The so-so flow don't matter when u have great story telling ability. Hot drop #1

Ecliptik
10-31-07, 03:40 PM
good****, hands down....everything wlse has been said...

#1rapper
10-31-07, 10:17 PM
props to all who gave feedback, will return the favor