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Buddah MAC
09-24-07, 03:10 AM
climate change those who front their heart arctic
long as the house working off a marked deck
chip stays on shoulder while life placed in the pot
fate dealt a hand where everything I got
is worth risking, even in a fixed game
melted wax pooling round the wick's flame
wouldn't exist without that light
and couldn't extinguish what denys night
and after absence, changed the world by being
fumbling for focus is seeding what you're seeing
with purpose, the still world first step nervous
but will follow you fine once you through the mines
and the bodies remain out there, warning to most
to few a view of those who couldn't coast
and had to break free of complacency's cage
while you sit & ***** about the bars less with age
unaware the door doesn't even have a lock
scared stiff as the world turns ensures a blocked
future you even deny dreams access to
stay wanting more than what we all regress to

Sicilian Spit
09-24-07, 03:16 AM
Kinda choppy for me, but some parts were sick, i.e. fixed game/ wick's flame. I'd say work on being more clear with what each line is saying cuz there is really no introduction to a lot of parts. Unless you are going for the hidden meaning thing, which I am not sure is really a big part of hip-hop.

EPHEBE
10-02-07, 02:15 AM
Damn it's good to see you in here Buddah Mac. Tru skool alum still puttin it down I see.

Don't know if everybody's gonna catch the subtle word play, and appreciate the message.

But uh, good metaphors, and I dig the way many of 'em build upon one another.

climate change those who front their heart arctic
long as the house working off a marked deck... word!

fate dealt a hand where everything I got
is worth risking, even in a fixed game Ugh!

Mz. ILL Seekah
10-04-07, 04:35 PM
Nice drop Buddah