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MaCRonI
09-23-07, 10:54 PM
A naked eye surpasses the limit of optic nerves/
Realigning where the iris and light waves merge/
My Piercing pupils rotate, coordinate in complete unison/
With my target’s every reflex, the barrel of my gun/
Swerving, stirring the air with a calibrated spoon/
Scooping iron flakes from a cereal to spell doom/
Give my lungs little breathing room to steady my aim/
Draped in my environment, so I can disguise my frame/
My prey striding cautiously, sensing my index/
twitch to flex, his feet drag into fading pecks/
he falls out of firing distance, click on night vision/
the green dark fails unveil the identify his position/
Sweat smears my camouflage, creating faint blurs/
Goosebumps clump on my arms, my focus stirs/
My eyes try to recreate the perfect assassination/
hear a slight foot precipitation, regain concentration/
Turn on heat vision, his body temperature realigns my heat/
Retrain my iron on where his mind and soul meet/
Iron talons ready dislodge bone meat, I take a deep breathe/
And FIRE a semi-auto piranha into the atmosphere’s depth/
Shortening distance through gravity’s paddling arms/
creating a ring in the air that can destroy all like Suaron’s/
BLOAW!!! Make a crater in his scalp like crashing comet/
Dive into his insides, turn it to beads of exploding vomit/
Dig into his mind, Scrambling thoughts worse than Agent Orange/
his tissues debris like a tornado pupil touched his organs/
Shootout his garments like a growing plant during Harvest/
A gunshot signals darkness to consume the dearly departed/

Sicilian Spit
09-24-07, 03:28 AM
Ok. This was definitely hot in a lot of ways. I like how it stayed on subject the whole time, but once again my beef is with the rhymin. There are times when it is very skillful - "BLOAW!!! makes a crater in his scalp like a crashing comet/Diving into his flesh, changing his insides to beads of exploding vomit/" - but other times the rhymes don't match up that well or don't rhyme at all - "Tunneling his mind, Scrambling his thoughts worse than Agent Orange/ Leaving his tissues debris like an monsoon flew through his organs/" - which explains why you can stay on topic the whole time. I like the vocab, but some lines are too verbose. Overall though, this was coo b/c of the content.

MaCRonI
09-24-07, 11:09 AM
its either coming with in with with all I got or nothin at all......nice feed tho!

Cali_Bud
09-24-07, 11:52 AM
A naked eye surpassing the limits of optic nerves/
Perfecting where the iris and a light connect and merge/
Piercing pupils rotate, coordinate in complete unison/
With my unsuspecting target, dartin the barrel of gun/
To his every reflex, stirring the air with nickel plated spoon/
Scooping metallic letters from primordial soup to spell doom/

Drop started off hot man, this was really good keep this sh*t up.

Ecliptik
09-24-07, 12:05 PM
this has to be the most complex/ making sense/ best drop i ever seen from you...period....

hands down fire...actually wish this woulda been a lil longer wit a hook....coulda made a ridiculous audio....

MaCRonI
09-24-07, 12:23 PM
thank ya'll both for the feed....greatly appreciate it

MaCRonI
09-25-07, 12:04 AM
i redid the lyrics...for a bit more clarity!

BreakCanon
09-25-07, 12:20 AM
Probably one of the tightest pieces I have seen here. Kudos.

MaCRonI
09-25-07, 06:12 PM
thanks yo...good lookin!