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CaseyJones
09-16-07, 06:45 PM
This is my first attempt writing a song. let me know what you think its kind of rough.

When you cant find your friends you still got the radio
The Radio I listen to the radio
The Radio I listen to the radio
The Radio

Starry sky at night pedal on the gas/ Mass pike at twilight gone in a flash/ Reach for the dial start to smile as I pass/ a station playing Outkast through my dash/ Start to listen on a mission to recall the past/ Reconnect to that nostalgic feeling/ because at times the radio leaves me reeling/ Take my cell hear Jay’s “girls” as I call you up/ then its Purple rain when I pick you up/ Just chilling/ Turn up Nashville skyline- its Bob Dylan/ Crusing on mass ave/ pass a yellow cab blasting/ Big Pun/ at a red light and when the songs done/ its Ghostface ft. Jada meaning time to Run/ I got a couple presets left to hit/ If you could read minds/ Like Santeria it would be sublime/ Too little time/ Before commercial break/ Devin the dude taught me the signs of hate/ Drive through pearl/ Just another tainted slum village/ pillaged by the world/ Hit the Bodega for some supplies/ Cool summer night and im feeling so high/ if BIG came on id be ready to die/ The radio fades away like the shades of gray/ into darkness/ Sign from above /and I in believe in a thing called love

Chorus

Ill see you at the crossroads/ listened to Bone thugs when My uncle died/ My room was a tomb I was trapped inside/ trying to hide the pain/ I don’t see them coming down my eyes/ So I had to hear “song cry”/ Try to survive/ Bridge over troubled waters helped me stay alive/ and as a kid Johnny Cash used to sing to me/ he had me feeling white trash was the thing to be/ and suddenly growing up didn’t seem so tough/ and plus im like the beatles all I need is love/ Fake is what im not/ always keep it on the level/ and im like a rolling stone/ with my feelings for the devil/ When im all alone/ Bass and treble/ get it adjusted/ used car with the balance broken/ A rule that stays unspoken/ don’t touch a mans radio/ its crazy though/ like Ceelo Green/ When a Dj reaches straight through a machine/ and plays that song that you need to hear/ lets make it clear/

Cali_Bud
09-16-07, 07:00 PM
This is a pretty good drop man. I like the first verse the most, I think you should have gotten off naming songs by the second verse though, kinda made me not want to read the rest but overall this was a pretty good drop. This was a topic I haven't seend before which made me more interested in reading it. Keep it up man

CaseyJones
09-16-07, 07:49 PM
thanks for the feedback man. After rereading it your def right about needing to switch it up on the second verse.

Ecliptik
09-17-07, 01:51 AM
nice sleeper....pleasantly surprised....hook sucked ass.....but the verses were pretty good...

oh...one more thing...LOSE THE PARAGRAPH FORMAT!

that is all:yes: