Cranium Rock (Freestyle)

[Mukel]

I'll bust ya cranium, i'll do the rock,
walk around with balls but you dont have a cock,
take it to the street, this is for fun,
this is a show down muthaf*cker, you cant run,
sun beating down, and your knees start to shake,
im showing this punk up, for being a fake,
a wolf in sheeps clothing, with the dna of a snake,
fat muthaf*cker, here have your cake,
eat it up sucker, cos you'll be gulping blood,
shots to your stomach, crip walkin in my hood,
food is for thought, well i bet you've got plenty,
loads you full of hollow tips, till the clip is empty,
simply, im mean and im looking for that green,
rob the corner store, then i'll rob the fiend,
quick to hide behind that f*ckin smoke screen,
I'll collapse ya lung make it a trauma for you to breath,
words sharp like a razor blade under the tongue,
yea you got swagger, but your lyrics are dung,
and you are done, you've been out done,
by the number one, you see ive won,
now go run, cos im like neo the chosen one.

[theman080]

This wasnt as bad as Cali made it out to be, but theres room for improvement. By peice of advice for you before I'm shots is to have more careful word selection and advance your flow, youve kept this one long enough its time to elevate....

Splittin a skull, with rhythm though, editions ins scrolls
So sicknin to hold, its gets you low, its rippin you though

try to get a cadence that had more rhymes in it like that ^^^

[Ecliptik]

This wasnt as bad as Cali made it out to be, but theres room for improvement. By peice of advice for you before I'm shots is to have more careful word selection and advance your flow, youve kept this one long enough its time to elevate....

Splittin a skull, with rhythm though, editions ins scrolls
So sicknin to hold, its gets you low, its rippin you though

try to get a cadence that had more rhymes in it like that ^^^

i agree and disagree.....cause then if he constantly tries to do that....he's gonna be ALOT more forced and it won't be executed aswell....forcing feedback like "this was aight, but really forced....your trying to do too much"

mukel...your at a level where your not wack.....but your not consistent....and to be honest....thats really hard to give suggestions and constructive feedback cause your passed alot of premature tricks.....i honestlt don't know what to say other then keep it up because your at a point where you can elevate on your own....or stay where your at....

[Mukel]

Cheers for the feedback guys, at the minute im having a mental block, so most of my recent stuff, is kinda forced, and therefore kinda basic and more random than most of my other stuff.