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Raw Spits
08-18-07, 09:02 PM
Two teens sit, contemplating there relations as of late
One sure of ones love, the other still contemplates


(Guy)
She reached into my hand, and stroked it soft
My words were lost, my lips mumbled the sentences I was trying to get across
I approached her then paused, searching for signs to come close
But ended up froze, stiff and still searching for signs to approach
My hands tensed, my mouth was dry, I was consumed in the moment of chance
Blissful romance or another night, alone with lonely hands....


(Girl)
His hand still in mine as I caress it sweetly
Repeatedly trying to find the words to say that I was leaving
He steps then pauses, I keep an unsteady smile
No longer will I stay in denial, I've grown but he's still a child
I see him coming closer, but I collect my thoughts before I say
"I'm going away, lets go our separate ways, my loves gone astray"...


(Guy)
She breaks the news, my heart sinks, and I ask "Why?"
She steps back, my hand still in her grasp, She replies

(Girl)
"I've lost the lust, our loves rust, its collapsing within us"
"We've watched the dust, enshroud what was, us being together as a must?"
His eyes sink, I feel the pain making his heart bend
I want to take my last comments back, and act, like it was all pretend
His hand slips from mine, his posture turns unsteady
I feel his pain already, But still I know it's him who's not ready...

(Guys)
She looks at me as an adolescent, I can tell by her stare
I watch her fair skin softly come closer as I also approach with care
I look in her eyes and ask "Why do you make your break"?
"What you take, is what you made, your the one who's fake"...


(Girl)
I'm fake? He's the one who's not grown
All blowing this out of proportion as I raise my tone
"Your not ready, your childish ways turn me towards the door"
"So I'm walking out to find something more steady, I'm not waiting no more"

(Guy)
"Every time I approach, you turn from me though"
"You blame it on inexperience but I guess yours raised your ego"
"Claiming I'm childish and you've taken enough of this"
"Saying I'm incapable of these feelings, but it is you who doesn't know what love is"

(Girl)
I step back, flabbergasted by such a claim
As my facial emotions change, I can't believe the non-sense that just came
"I've waited for a kiss, it's been a month now we've dated"
"What I'm trying to state is, you show no love as if your afraid to say it"

(Guy)
"I'm not like other guys who said it just to be yours"
"When I do it, I want the whole sentence to mean more"
"I want to be more, into you then these others have"
"They've left you on the side, I'd rather take you the whole path"

(Girl)
"So you show your love by giving none for me to take"
"I'd rather you make false promises cause as of late,"
"I'd settle for something fake!"


(Guy)
"You want the truth, I've never loved anyone more its true"
"I say a lot of false game but I'd never tried to pretend with you"
"Listen I understand your position but still the shades of my eyes stay blue"

(Narrarator)
She then come's closer, placing her cheek-next, To his lips and slowly with much deep-ness
She slides her lips to his, as he tries best to match
Passionate kissing commences, and they step back
She looks to his face and he into her eyes
As they release each others hand and say their final goodbye....

ILL_FAM
08-18-07, 09:46 PM
Two teens sit, contemplating there relations as of late
One sure of ones love, the other still contemplates
(Guy)
She reached into my hand, and stroked it soft
My words were lost, my lips mumbled the sentences I was trying to get across
I approached her then paused, searching for signs to come close
But ended up froze, stiff and still searching for signs to approach
My hands tensed, my mouth was dry, I was consumed in the moment of chance
Blissful romance or another night, a lonely with lonely hands....
(Girl)
His hand still in mine as I caress it sweetly
Repeatedly trying to find the words to say that I was leaving
He steps then pauses, I keep an unsteady smile
No longer will I stay in denial, I've grown but he's still a child
I see him coming closer, but I collect my thoughts before I say
"I'm going away, lets go our separate ways, my loves gone astray"...


(Guy)
She breaks the news, my heart sinks, and I ask "Why?"
She steps back, my hand still in her grasp, She replies
(Girl)
"I've lost the lust, our loves rust, its collapsing within us"
"We've watched the dust, enshroud what was, us being together as a must?"
His eyes sink, I feel the pain making his heart bend
I want to take my last comments back, and act, like it was all pretend
His hand slips from mine, his posture turns unsteady
I feel his pain already, But still I know it's him who's not ready...
(Guys)
She looks at me as an adolescent, I can tell by her stare
I watch her fair skin softly come closer as I also approach with care
I look in her eyes and ask "Why do you make your break"?
"What you take, is what you made, your the one who's fake"...

(Girl)
I'm fake? He's the one who's not grown
All blowing this out of proportion as I raise my tone
"Your not ready, your childish ways turn me towards the door"
"So I'm walking out to find something more steady, I'm not waiting no more"
(Guy)
"Every time I approach, you turn from me though"
"You blame it on inexperience but I guess yours raised your ego"
"Claiming I'm childish and you've taken enough of this"
"Saying I'm incapable of these feelings, but it is you who doesn't know what love is"

(Girl)
I step back, flabbergasted by such a claim
As my facial emotions change, I can't believe the non-sense that just came
"I've waited for a kiss, it's been a month now we've dated"
"What I'm trying to state is, you show no love as if your afraid to say it"

(Guy)
"I'm not like other guys who said it just to be yours"
"When I do it, I want the whole sentence to mean more"
"I want to be more, into you then these others have"
"They've left you on the side, I'd rather take you the whole path"

(Girl)
"So you show your love by giving none for me to take"
"I'd rather you make false promises cause as of late,"
"I'd settle for something fake!"

(Guy)
"You want the truth, I've never loved anyone more its true"
"I say a lot of false game but I'd never tried to pretend with you"
"Listen I understand your position but still the shades of my eyes stay blue"
(Narrarator)
She then come's closer, placing her cheek-next, To his lips and slowly with much deep-ness
She slides her lips to his, as he tries best to match
Passionate kissing commences, and they step back
She looks to his face and he into her eyes
As they release each others hand and say their final goodbye....


yo this is very relevant to me at the moment but there was no goodbyes thank god....ah i think the kindness and emotion and **** comes out at the beginning with boy who obviously is younger than the girl...dam just like a woman she was cold on that one....very deep bro keep at it

Ecliptik
08-20-07, 06:28 PM
alot different from what i'm use to seein....but change is always needed and it was good....a bit emotional for the mood i'm in...i prolly shoulda read this when i was bored or somethin so it wouldn't change my mood...lol....

Cali_Bud
08-25-07, 10:45 AM
Damn this was a hot drop.

Should've punched the chick in the back of the head, but that's just me
:rolleyes: lol nah this was a really good drop

Raw Spits
10-01-07, 10:46 AM
Never got to give thanks on the rates.....good lookin