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ILL_FAM
08-07-07, 10:28 PM
all wack rappers n back chatters get smackd flatter
than pancakes, these dam fakes, get bukkaked(:gag: LMAO)
cause i nutt madder, gotta weak bladder, so i piss on ya grave
brooklyn home to the brave, home to the lyrical insane, membrane/
i spit quicker, my ****s thicker than a black hookers thighs
i abuse liquor, my muse (music) is slicker than lisas left eye
i dawn, drop bombs rise calm unharmed from fatal warz
i pawn, get armed body the prison guards yet i got scarz
i spread deadly like sarz catching me is like catching cars u die/

ima rose from concrete had the fearless frose at my feet
i came from the slums where no water runs n no food comes
i explode with heat im tearless i close on defeat with no peeps (symbolising fighting to the death)
im a real thug no re-run, replay or re-done, i re-up my gun and blast into the cradle from the death bed recarinated as pun/ yeah one ****ed up dream, it would seem, i never lose steam
though i lost supreme from my team gunned down at four-teen
faced death my self on the scene treatd like a b1tch never ****ed though
that was my luck though to die slow got my throat cut clean/

(ambulance on the scene, "young man about 13 years of age with a knife wound to the throat area, we are considering this as gang related)


as u can imagine i survived lmao im here and im 19 now ****s been cool just glad to get my chance

ILL_FAM
08-08-07, 12:13 AM
i posted this around an hour and half ago and still real tiered lmao so if it that good then chill im just exhausted but hit it up anyways

upping for comments :smoker:

ILL_FAM
08-08-07, 10:51 PM
yo some comments would be apprciated i dont give a **** if u down it im kool as long as u tell me why and no hate please...


all wack rappers n back chatters get smackd flatter
than pancakes, these dam fakes, get bukkaked( LMAO)
cause i nutt madder, gotta weak bladder, so i piss on ya grave
brooklyn home to the brave, home to the lyrical insane, membrane/

this bit gives aspect to what i would do to enemies lmao

i spit quicker, my ****s thicker than a black hookers thighs
i abuse liquor, my muse (music) is slicker than lisas left eye
i dawn, drop bombs rise calm unharmed from fatal warz
i pawn, get armed body the prison guards yet i got scarz
i spread deadly like sarz catching me is like catching cars u die/

this bit expresses bits of my life again with the black hooker and this chick looked like left eye it was ****ed up see i used to work as a kid ina brothel ****ed up story yo but get it....i was also in young persons correctional facility and me and my dude in there had a mad fight with the guards hit them with chairs n **** it was crazy and the rest is just rhyming basically..


and the rest should be able to explain itself just thought the first verse would confuse ppl a little bit iight 1

ILL_FAM
08-09-07, 12:13 AM
yo is anyone gonna give me advice or props on this one damn its like im a irch white kid up on this **** LMAO

Bosstradamus
08-09-07, 12:36 AM
ima rose from concrete had the fearless frose at my feet
i came from the slums where no water runs n no food comes
i explode with heat im tearless i close on defeat with no peeps

that was my fav part....good useage of multis..overall the whole thing was nice....wasnt perfect but then again who is right...vocab was on point too

Bosstradamus
08-09-07, 12:38 AM
word and peep the collab wit me and theman080 (marked for death) lookin for some feedback

Raw Spits
08-09-07, 07:03 PM
Ok Wasn't feeling the first verse but the last line was a nice bright spot

i spread deadly like sarz catching me is like catching cars u die/


2nd verse was more conscious....rhyme scheme was on point....nice


Good job

ILL_FAM
08-09-07, 07:50 PM
Ok Wasn't feeling the first verse but the last line was a nice bright spot
2nd verse was more conscious....rhyme scheme was on point....nice
Good job

iight man thanx much appreciated