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ILL_FAM
08-04-07, 03:20 PM
haha this is for courtdog....aight clear it


dis FOOL SEEM LIGHT, ONE HIT AND HE'S OUT! my 'erbs fantastic, but this DUDE'S WEED DRY, like SIXTY AN OUNCE.. (comparison of rhymes) you the TRUE WEAK TYPE, get HIT IN THE MOUTH!, ill do it east coast style send STICK-UP-KIDZ-TO-YA-HOUSE// You a SUBURB-PREP-***** and me im ABSURD-WITH-DEPTH-FIX Dont Matter Wut U Saw Or heard U-MUST-HAVE-A-DEATHWISH, u a homo dude stop SWALLOWIN-SAUAGE only way u beating me is if u TAKING-A-HOSTAGE, see im now FLAKING-N-FLOSSIN my GAGE got ya homos TOSSING, HOPING-YA'LL-CAN-RUN-LIKE-AN-OSTERIDGE, and be gone in sixty secs like NICOLUS CAGE// dawg U da BAMMER-TYPE, saying tha "N-Word" ..but U "VANNAH-WHITE!" n i bet his FRIENDS-ARE-CAUCASIAN, dudes needed a cook SO-THEY-HIRED-AN-ASIAN, so the N-bombs are safe.. long as the black guy's OUTTA SITE!!// like nas says GET-IT-TOGETHA i rock hoes U-N-UR-BROS-ROCK-TOGETHA im taking TOP-SPOT-FELLAS leaving *****es like coutdog in the CELLARS//(omfg) Collabo with court and Illy? PROBABLY NOT. IT WOULDNT BE HOT. n I could give you a beat, but I'd rather not see the value of my PROPERTY DROP!!/ so... you PRALLY SHOULD STOP..rappin, cuz ya style's incomplete like trynna dance without LOCKIN THE "POP!" dude, you was just learning to Talk when I was c-WALKIN TO PAC!!!

im done here :smoker:

ILL_FAM
08-06-07, 10:29 PM
aight im upping this so it gets some looks i like this piece myself for some reason so plz feedback peeps much appreciated :smoker:

#1rapper
08-06-07, 10:35 PM
the way u have it set up just seems iron solomonish...like the CAPS make it seem like ur screaming and thats all the crazy fucc does...but yeah to me it was pretty good but your structure just makes me wanna not read it like, it just seems too jammed up, if u switched it up it be easier to spot your wordplay and rhymes...

ILL_FAM
08-06-07, 10:37 PM
the way u have it set up just seems iron solomonish...like the CAPS make it seem like ur screaming and thats all the crazy fucc does...but yeah to me it was pretty good but your structure just makes me wanna not read it like, it just seems too jammed up, if u switched it up it be easier to spot your wordplay and rhymes...

most def ive been thinking bout my structure but i cant seem to get it right u got any pointers on it

Bosstradamus
08-07-07, 12:44 AM
yeah i read it and it sounded a lil chippy maybe cuz of the structure....but overall **** was def. on point...great use of wordplay