War with terror

[Mukel]

We sit in our armchairs condoning war,
sending our sons to kill the poor,
we dont understand what there minds must go through,
scalps have a price, every hair on your head,
in a deralict village in the north of basra,
can you understand, no, really can ya?
Now ask yourself, would you want to be there,
heat beating down on your sweaty brow,
shrappnel wizzing by like your caught in a sandstorm,
come along way since you were a newborn,
18 years, since your date of birth,
mum and dad at home celebrating with cake,
little brother and sister watching rikki lake,
other peoples problems but you've got your own,
king of your castle, but miles away from home,
how you gonna live when your all alone,
conceeding defeat is not an option,
unite with are allys rally and fight,
terrorism is terror its in the name,
terrorise the terrorists, make them fear the name,
instead you lock them up, and keep them safe,
when in reality they should all be slain,
human rights is a bag of ****e,
what rights do you have when you kill civillians,
and kill the innocent, you piece of excrement,
theres no defending them, no compromise,
the only thing i wish for, is there demise!

[#1rapper]

im not gonna break the whole verse down, but i will comment on a few things i noticed

. the content was good, was descriptive and stayed clear
.flow coulda been alot better...some parts didn't go at all
.some parts seemed forced...like the can ya line, imo

worst line:mum and dad at home celebrating with cake,
little brother and sister watching rikki lake,

best line:terrorism is terror its in the name,
terrorise the terrorists, make them fear the name

dont no why this shyt is slept on but yeah...keep droppin