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paranormatic
03-29-07, 07:38 PM
ay yo da soil is soft n da foundation is weak,
we live on a digiable planet leavin our shoeprints embedded in the conccrete,
fa street dreamers to fallow it,
full of broken promises n hallow tips,
death we model it,
quenchin the devils thirst souls
uhhhhh....we should bottle it,
made from da best $hit on Earth,
cultivated from dirt,
a black rose never knowin what da pollen is worth,
F who came first,
da end justifies the means,
dis revelation came came worst,
the end of all things,
It seems,
in the field my people manifest tall dreams,
lime lights is sour ignorin they're true callins,...
We want the power like "THE MAN" n the Whips of the masters,
workin our from da streets up to da church,
dats azz backwards,
da facts is,
most won't read it if it's close captured,
da same slaves inraged complainin dey backs hurt,

Ecliptik
03-31-07, 03:18 PM
ok....well....the message is kinda all over the place...unless the message is just about "everything"?...anyways....it did blend well...but the thing that bugs me the most about it is your formating....it's really ****in annoring...it flowed well....just stop all that damn line breakage....it's a pain in the as to read...lol