Heartbroken

[Mukel]

Im sitting in my room and i feel all alone,
reminising back to when i had a home,
to when i had a girl, and when i had a family,
it was all friendly and it was all nice,
then things turned sour, practially overnight,
It felt like a nail struck me in my heart,
like a vice type grip and my body torn apart,
the remody for heartache is to restrain,
from giving your heart to *****s,
*****s only wanna get there hands on your riches,
its not technical, its not intelectual its logical,
first rule of war is dont start a war,
dont put yourself in a position to be reversed,
consider me right, its not cos im bright,
its cos ive lived my life, live it and live it right

[energy]

very elementary but it had heart.
I'd have to know your age to give a true critic of this.
Overall, it seems very beginner but.. but but...
I can feel you when I read it so I know you would deliver with passion.
Sometimes that makes me forget a basic rhyme scheme and vocab.
Keep movin Mu, thanks for the read.