Tonight

[Spittknowledge]

Would you mind if I held you tonight
Nothing more and nothing less
I just want to feel your body near mine
I want to hear the beat of your heart
as we lay cuddled together
I want to trace every curve
til it embeds my memory
I want your warmth to be my own
Your soft skin against my firm chest
Safe in my arms
Til the moon retires and the sun wakes us
Let's lay together
As I hold you close to me
No strings and no games
I just want to feel you near me tonight

[sexydeltagirl]

"No strings and no games"

Hmmmm, if only it was this simple! lol. I can dig this piece def. something nice to read to that special someone...

Dope!

[Spittknowledge]

thanks,

p s it can be that simple given the right circumstances. Time to expand, lol:hug:

[energy]

It's hard to give an honest criticism of this piece because you seem like a genuinely good-hearted dude. SO, I'll try to be as constructive as possible, I respect you efforts. Great honest spilliage in this one but the subject is tired and not very well executed. If you're doing something that is not new, it's got to be delivered in a new way. This was niether. However, I feel nice inside. It's my imagination that you're better than this. Is this "Spitt" from the open-mic forum?

[Spittknowledge]

It's hard to give an honest criticism of this piece because you seem like a genuinely good-hearted dude. SO, I'll try to be as constructive as possible, I respect you efforts. Great honest spilliage in this one but the subject is tired and not very well executed. If you're doing something that is not new, it's got to be delivered in a new way. This was niether. However, I feel nice inside. It's my imagination that you're better than this. Is this "Spitt" from the open-mic forum?


Your honesty is appreciated though I fail to get the tired part since most of the things I hear in the media or elsewhere is what I consider "TIRED" and this was a direct, yet simple attempt to attack that very issue. I thank you for reading and commenting though and no I'm not Spitt.