first little freestyle

[the orange soda kid]

on some friday afternoon ****, going home in a half hour

long day stressed, hot and sweaty
best part is, now the pockets heavy
ready for spending
goin' get fuc*ked up the night ending
on a bi*tch chest hopefully
that's how it s'posed to be
kick a little game she all over me
my boys spinnin' in the village, sullivan room
buy out the bar with all of them goons
psych, not a buy the bar out kinda fella
not yet at least
gimme a few years, then ya'll see
bottom line gonna be drinkin' and smokin'
i'm itchin' and hopin'
a little spittin' then pokin'
then i be rippin' her open, ya heard
wallet locked and loaded an AK
goddamn how the kid love payday

[MaCRonI]

Yawn.....you sound so boring...no metttas, multis, fucced up structure, no concept...just generic rhymes.....no excuse kid....wither put up or shut up....

2/10

[energy]

I don't know what that dude is talking about man.
Soda, this **** is aight.

"bottom line gonna be drinkin' and smokin'
i'm itchin' and hopin'
a little spittin' then pokin'
then i be rippin' her open, ya heard
wallet locked and loaded an AK
goddamn how the kid love payday"

That right there is more complex than half the **** on this site.
I'm giving my opinion on the assumption that you're just getting started.
Onward son...
Oh and props for this right here...

"buy out the bar with all of them goons
psych, not a buy the bar out kinda fella"

Honesty is such a novel concept in hip hop these days.