Untitled: One Foot In - One Foot Out

[sexydeltagirl]

I got one foot in the "world" and one in the pulpit...
Sorta like trying to balance good and bad with my actions...
Trying to live the life of an ideal woman...
Can get fustrating when I sometimes wanna shake my hips and gyrate...
Kinda sad when you thing about it...
Being trapped in your own skin...
I need a healing...
Maybe some theraputic tunes like gospel..
But instead I blast music from my speakers laced with profanity...
It's like some artist know my misery...
My nights are sometimes restless...
Cause I'm not quite over him yet...
Or that I can't face rejection...
And at this exact moment happiness escapes me...
It's like I'm stuck and my laziness is the hard place...
I can't trust folks when they say they have only good intentions...
Cause at any given moment they can turn on me...
So when I do sleep, it's with one eye open...
Cause I'm scared of those dreams....
They have me up in the middle of the night and praying for my sanity...
Praying that the other foot will join the other...
Everyday I'm trying...
To just surrender and admit I'm not perfect...
And that GOD didn't let me get this far for nothin...
So as I stuggle to completely let go...
I'll be blastin "Life's a B!tch" trying to fight...
My Demons....

[sexydeltagirl]

......:sad:

[Nadira...Rare]

:hug: I told you... we are kindred spirits... I swear it's like we go through things at the same time... I found myself in church this past sunday looking for something and I ain't been there in a month of sunday's as my momma would say... anyway I feel you sis keep ya head up

[sexydeltagirl]

:hug: I told you... we are kindred spirits... I swear it's like we go through things at the same time... I found myself in church this past sunday looking for something and I ain't been there in a month of sunday's as my momma would say... anyway I feel you sis keep ya head up
Indeed, it seems that way lady! I'm going to check out this church on Sunday. I'm looking for something and I'm not sure what it is, I just need peace of mind and at the moment I don't have it....:sad:

I'll def. keep my head up and you do the same....:hug:

[Cali_Bud]

I need a healing...
Maybe some theraputic tunes like gospel..
But instead I blast music from my speakers laced with profanity...
It's like some artist know my misery...
^^^^my favorite part. Again..lol another hot drop. I'm suprised their isn't more feedback. Upped!!!

[sexydeltagirl]

I need a healing...
Maybe some theraputic tunes like gospel..
But instead I blast music from my speakers laced with profanity...
It's like some artist know my misery...
^^^^my favorite part. Again..lol another hot drop. I'm suprised their isn't more feedback. Upped!!!
Hey U!!!, how you doing?

Thanks for the feedback on this joint ... ;)

[energy]

DeltaG,
You've got felling and things to say but it's not poetry until you say it a unique way. This is an "actual" account of your feelings. Poetry is made up of imagery and metaphor. If I want someone to understand how dark the night was, I don't say literally, "The night was pitch black". That's actually the facts and does nothing to convey the "feeling" that the dark night gave me. And all we want to know is how it made you feel, not what happened. I can read a whole piece that does't seem to mean anything but the collection of images and metaphors have created an environment that invokes these emotions. I don't go to church or follow religion. How do I relate?

"The night was dark as a coffin cold, with foot layers of earth stealing the stars shine. A vacuum of light absorbing all but the dim glow inside me."

We should feel the words. Not simply understand them. You communicate well and with respect to your readers but give them more credit. And give yourself more creative leeway. YOU make the rules.

[sexydeltagirl]

DeltaG,
You've got felling and things to say but it's not poetry until you say it a unique way. This is an "actual" account of your feelings. Poetry is made up of imagery and metaphor. If I want someone to understand how dark the night was, I don't say literally, "The night was pitch black". That's actually the facts and does nothing to convey the "feeling" that the dark night gave me. And all we want to know is how it made you feel, not what happened. I can read a whole piece that does't seem to mean anything but the collection of images and metaphors have created an environment that invokes these emotions. I don't go to church or follow religion. How do I relate?

"The night was dark as a coffin cold, with foot layers of earth stealing the stars shine. A vacuum of light absorbing all but the dim glow inside me."

We should feel the words. Not simply understand them. You communicate well and with respect to your readers but give them more credit. And give yourself more creative leeway. YOU make the rules.
Babes, I really don't know how to respond to this. Your definition of poetry and mine are totally def. anything I right on the page rather is rhymes or is metaphoric paints a picture, a picture of how I feel/have felt or will probably feel in the future. I'm not going to dress up my words so they may give double meanings, or sugarcoat my emotions. And I know that I won't connect with every person who reads my work but one person will understand/feel were I'm coming from and that in itself makes my work more than just words on a page...

It's just my words, you can take it or leave it - Thanks for your input though...

[energy]

I see, anything that you write on a piece of paper is poetry?
I would hold myself to a higher standard than that.
There is no "your" definition and "my" definition of a word.
A word exists because a definition was agreed upon.
We made a whole book of them. I'm not going to argue whether or not poetry is anything that you write on paper. It's not. That's why we have the word "poetry". To describe a certain way something is written. Rather than just calling it, some **** on paper. There is no argument that you could produce to prove otherwise. This is a journal entry, posted in a poetry forum. You might want to be more understanding when someone expects it to be poetry. No one was trying to offend you or insult your emotion. Not sure where you got the idea that I wanted the emotion subdued. On the contrary, this lacked emotion which would have been conveyed if it was more poetic. I love when people post **** on a forum and only take into consideration the accolades. Please tell me that you're open to growth. You know what... forget all the time I've spent actually giving a **** to read and discuss your piece with you... or any of the number that I sought today.... next time, I'll be sure to just say, "Nice post."

[sexydeltagirl]

I see, anything that you write on a piece of paper is poetry?
I would hold myself to a higher standard than that.
There is no "your" definition and "my" definition of a word.
A word exists because a definition was agreed upon.
We made a whole book of them. I'm not going to argue whether or not poetry is anything that you write on paper. It's not. That's why we have the word "poetry". To describe a certain way something is written. Rather than just calling it, some **** on paper. There is no argument that you could produce to prove otherwise. This is a journal entry, posted in a poetry forum. You might want to be more understanding when someone expects it to be poetry. No one was trying to offend you or insult your emotion. Not sure where you got the idea that I wanted the emotion subdued. On the contrary, this lacked emotion which would have been conveyed if it was more poetic. I love when people post **** on a forum and only take into consideration the accolades. Please tell me that you're open to growth. You know what... forget all the time I've spent actually giving a **** to read and discuss your piece with you... or any of the number that I sought today.... next time, I'll be sure to just say, "Nice post."
Wow, are you upset? I'm completly mature and not only did I respect your opinion I encourage it. So before you call me immature and blast me for trying to answer your question take into consideration that just because you have an opinion of what YOU think poetry is or should be does not mean everyone will agree. And no I did not only take into consideration the accolades in fact I made it clear to you that it would be folks who would not understand or like my work and that's fine.

And just to show you how mature I can really be I won't come and so oh Fukk it!, I won't read your work etc. cause to me writing rather it's poetry or in a monologue is bigger than you and me going back and forwards on SOHH....

[energy]

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This post has no purpose other than to acknowledge that I have read your reply.

[tribal complex]

I felt compelled to reply to the response I read from Energy... It's obvious dude doesn't know what he's talking bout... I've been keeping up on Sexydelta's pieces for a long time now. To be honest at first I wasn't really feeling them but, there was something in her writing that kept me coming back. Eventually her pieces grew on me and now her way with words is the only reason I even pay visits to SOHH anymore. I just want to say keep up the good work Sexydelta because you inspire me through your truth.

[sexydeltagirl]

I felt compelled to reply to the response I read from Energy... It's obvious dude doesn't know what he's talking bout... I've been keeping up on Sexydelta's pieces for a long time now. To be honest at first I wasn't really feeling them but, there was something in her writing that kept me coming back. Eventually her pieces grew on me and now her way with words is the only reason I even pay visits to SOHH anymore. I just want to say keep up the good work Sexydelta because you inspire me through your truth.
Awww, thanks! this means a lot to me. I def. want you to continue to write cause I'll def. do the same....