DOMINION: I'ma Duct Tape Ya Face Shut...

[theman080]

I'ma a night marauder, and ya ripe for slaughta...
Especially since I'm thirsty I'll entice ya falta...
You stumble to my doorstep, I'll snap ya threshold bytch
Handle the entrance to your fallopian, take that next zone quick
Shadows perform a service, keep my smokescreen locked
Creep to hoes in flocks, weed em out, hold & pop
Take everything sacred and blow its ash in ya face
Step on the subtle ember with a passionate pace
Spirit dismembered and severed wit ya time at my place
Upon ya exit remain pathetic and inclined to a state
Of damaged goods...fukk you, you shoulda hid wit ya set
Cuz I stalked you then I caught you, there's no innocence left
Take therapy fees wit you, plus a secret to tell
Or keep to yourself...
Just remember in your psyche that'll easily dwell
Every face contains some resemblance or a measure of pain
Birth mark shows that little peice of mind that you neva gon' gain
Since I entered ya frame, you always know that I'm present
Attentive on where ya headin, I'm still destined to set it
No cuffs ever touched my wrist, no rear-view surveillance
Just waitin around the block, appears your assailant...
Ya happiness is gone, attractive appearance appears thin
But in a minute I'ma fix it, give you an ear to ear grin
Knifeblade trace the sketch, with a delicate touch
Droolin like a starved mutt, can tell that ya fukked
My touch is the key to the pearly gates, left wit the kiss of death
Sinister wit my steps, unless I slip, I'm in it till death

[sn0man]

Take everything sacred and blow its ash in ya face

One of the most memorable lines Ive heard here

Man......this was off the hook it was no doubt one of the darkest joints Ive read in a minute the wordchoice was EXCELENT amd teh imigery was crazy It went really well and delved into a lot of the aspects of a girls feelings and emotions in this type pf situation

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[IvIdividual]

This joint left me jive speechless...

Flow was dead on as use-u-al. One word...solid. I also have to agree with Snoman....This was mos def on some dark isht. Im not really sure what the topic at hand was but whoever or whatever it is or was better head the opposite direction. This joint was bananas.

This lil section right here touched me...
"Take everything sacred and blow its ash in ya face
Step on the subtle ember with a passionate pace
Spirit dismembered and severed wit ya time at my place
Upon ya exit remain pathetic and inclined to a state
Of damaged goods...fukk you, you shoulda hid wit ya set
Cuz I stalked you then I caught you, there's no innocence left"


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IvI

[W.I.Z.E.]

Handle the entrance to your fallopian, take that next zone quick

I was just a lil confused by this. Are you callin' this cat a b!tch?

Shadows perform a service, keep my smokescreen locked
Creep to hoes in flocks, weed em out, hold & pop

Like the first line but the second seemed like filler.


Take everything sacred and blow its ash in ya face
Step on the subtle ember with a passionate pace
Spirit dismembered and severed wit ya time at my place
Upon ya exit remain pathetic and inclined to a state
Of damaged goods...fukk you, you shoulda hid wit ya set
Cuz I stalked you then I caught you, there's no innocence left
Take therapy fees wit you, plus a secret to tell
Or keep to yourself...
Just remember in your psyche that'll easily dwell
Some filler in the middle here but I like the therapy part...that's funny.



this was decent effort. I mean a nice in your fact type of joint but I fee like at times it lacked punched. Had some nice jabs but no real knock out blow and that's what I like to see in my dominion title fights. Some hard hitting hooks, uppercuts and crosses to go along w/ jabs or else to me you're just setting some up but not closing it out.


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[Sleeps Thoreau]

this was kind of freightening
i read it twice
it was decent. the flow was dope


Just remember in your psyche that'll easily dwell
Every face contains some resemblance or a measure of pain
Birth mark shows that little peice of mind that you neva gon' gain
Since I entered ya frame, you always know that I'm present
Attentive on where ya headin, I'm still destined to set it
No cuffs ever touched my wrist, no rear-view surveillance
Just waitin around the block, appears your assailant...



i think that ^^^ section buried me deepest into the mindset of this piece.

as far as everything else ur flow moved it along but it was talk talk talk. figure techniques to set in more 'greenery' as they say... more showing and less telling. because them it winds up like a battle rap
"and then i do that"
"and guess what, you forgot this, so now i do that"

you could definatelly do more to make this some cinimatic alfred hitchcock sh1t


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[Midnite]

the title alone tells me the tone of this piece, can't really have that kind of title and talk about daydreaming in a bed full of flowers for a couple of hours on a beautiful day, naw

there are quotables throughout this joint, and my esteemed colleagues beat me to it, so no sense in requoting them, but, there was also filler...and considering the sadistic nature and tone here, you prolly could've done a tad better with the one two punch of shyt you had going....more imagery and this joint could've truly ill, figurative and literally, lol

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