DOMINION: Walking Off

[Sleeps Thoreau]

Her eye improvises still
in eve's whisper off the tail of the butterfuly

i climb in the stutter of time

seized in rememberance of what the eidelons
of love have got to be

a drifter behind retinas in the palms of my mind
stopped to see the true impression of an omen
she's looped the essence of the moment

The breath of her tone wove me
like sex to the moan of other women couldn't

then left me alone atop the legs of padestrians.

What echo's in sentiment insists i'm the extention of him
and we're a stretch from us pulling to tell

if we look through to an opposite ends of two wells.
well,

what every spell above me now must've knew well
was me flooding out her screening brow
would come to me comming to
under clouds which intuit a sullen dew

as her eyes

silently skii away



And on the stray, i can hope all i want
she sulks a note stars quote through a low sky,
i've been the sand, sea and shoreline before her eye
and watching the bottle float by

while reoccurs the vibe that with goodbye we
cuddled for sleep

in passing retreat air bubbled in the sheet seeps

And the minute fancies wind kids with me
encouragingly, i don't care
anymore than 'bout why the horizon stares

smoking, bare, dry in it's glare



____with everything that paces by behind
____you don't see nothing but the cold between
____denying your heart it's every attempt at a hug,
____knowing you see where you're going...
____lashes sent to hold you
____leaning on, crashing wet shattered love!

[MaCRonI]

Nice....this a like a poem to me yo....this hot good....definately fire in all aspects yo...it's definately a classic drop(in terms of poetry)..in my book..job well done!!!!

9.4/10

[IvIdividual]

This was beautiful Spank.

"then left me alone atop the legs of padestrians."
-I like the image from this wordery.

"And on the stray, i can hope all i want
she sulks a note stars quote through a low sky,
i've been the sand, sea and shoreline before her eye
and watching the bottle float by"
-Man! Greenery.

The only part I wasnt really feeling was the last "section"

____with everything that paces by behind
____you don't see nothing but the cold between
____denying your heart it's every attempt at a hug,
____knowing you see where you're going...
____lashes sent to hold you
____leaning on, crashing wet shattered love!

It just seemed like it didnt come as natural as the prior parts. IMO the cliches were too obvious. Seemed like that part really didnt belong. "smoking, bare, dry in it's glare" would have been a nice ending.

In my eyes... this is the best drop in DOMINION yet.


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IvI

[In$ane $hane]

i like dis 1 alot...one of da best i seen from you...especially on a poetic point of view. its harder to make ya verses more poetic than jus rhyme....feelin it,but i wont say da best in Dominion dat I've seen

da onli prob i had witt dis,was flow could have been better & u could of thrown in betta metaz,but other than dat...it waas str8

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[Midnite]

This is S.Free the poetically inclined

I liked this one, smooth throughout the piece, the pacing was there, and it of course had you're own flavor to the mix

a drifter behind retinas in the palms of my mind
stopped to see the true impression of an omen
she's looped the essence of the moment

The breath of her tone wove me
like sex to the moan of other women couldn't

then left me alone atop the legs of pedestrians.

Niceness

And on the stray, i can hope all i want
she sulks a note stars quote through a low sky,
I've been the sand, sea and shoreline before her eye
and watching the bottle float by

The imagery here is whats gonna get ya the high score...over all a very strong piece of work Spank

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[theman080]

The imagery on this was just insane, shyt was about as vivid as it gets really. Perfect nod on the imagery, I cant even elaborate too much on it, everyone else covered it. In terms of imagery, the whole thing is a quoteable...I'm not really a poetic head but I was feelin the flow through the most part, there was only one line in the whole ish I felt was borderline "ehh", anyway, since I'm not a poetic type head my rating may be skewed but....



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Shyt was deep...



Stay Up

[Salah]

"stopped to see the true impression of an omen
she's looped the essence of the moment"

Yes sir!!!
Visual right there.

[Invisible Vision]

s.free phd

as always, coming with something not seen enough on sohh. There have always been times where you've combined images and ideas that had me stop reading between bars like

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damn
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And on the stray, i can hope all i want
she sulks a note stars quote through a low sky,
I've been the sand, sea and shoreline before her eye
and watching the bottle float by This section has been quoted for drug relation

What echo's in sentiment insists i'm the extention of him
and we're a stretch from us pulling to tell

if we look through to an opposite ends of two wells.
well,

what every spell above me now must've knew well
was me flooding out her screening brow
would come to me comming to
under clouds which intuit a sullen dew

as her eyes

silently skii away But there was dope in this trunk too.....

man, you already know

~iv


*get up with me sometime, fam. hope all is well