DOMINION: Momentum Clarity

[Sleeps Thoreau]

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You're going to come in here
skim through the first paragraph
then the scroll bar is going to
fall and climb back up
like the spy outside with suction cups
.
...to know how you should rate this...

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You're unfamiliar with the name.and
i had between two and four diamonds
to make one for myself
before you came in
.
...where i rate on that scale
depends on who i knew before you knew
i was amongst the who's who
of this
uber-favoritist matrix...
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yea you can dig it! Haha…
(sips water… stand up bass fickle in the darkness)
(taps foot, head nodding… chatting low with someone up front, winks at someone who whistled, and waves)
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You're hyped to write of late
the only time your eyes read is
here at the open mic,
i'll be here next weekend if not tonight
and probly see the mos impactful word
of the tightest piece
has become novelty
you're not all alike! but you all draw
from phantom rivalries and each others rants
now follow me: do the dance!
.
...move along, this piece doesn't interest you! no wordplay about jason kid's honey here... and every thread is dead; nothing left to kill...

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You're hyped to write of late
i see my piece been upped on the boards..
below three or four
to which it says you last replied,
below yours!
.
...hAhA! why thank you. where ya been?...



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doo doo tahhh tadahhhhhh ahhh-
doo doo
doo doo tahhh tadahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
(stand up bass has slowly begun to rumble, and sleeps' voice gets louder)
DOO DOO TAHHH TADAAHHHHHH

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let me tell you the story of two musicians
they were poets really
who didn't know they knew each other
till the world got small when they were singled out
of a scennnnnneeeeeeeee

happening spots, crowds were small
but you had your own click.. they'd spot eachother
regulars
but saw each other less
as we were fed them
through magazzzzzzzinesssss

hey joan, hey mr. tamborinnneee
hey SEEN, hey Obey
lookie there it's lorca with salvitore Dali....

yea..

So





what?


Well, what are you wearing today shawty?
what you smell like? how you speak?


yea..

so



What?

Well, whatcha see as beautiful u know what i mean?
whatcha see as ugly, ya see what im sayin?


yea..

so


What?

well, when you talk to ya lady whats the communication like?
how bout at the workplace? whats the notion of power today?


and..

so

WHAT?

well, the thing is that you came HERE for the story

SO
WHAT?










so that you can own your destiny!
you're the one standing here with a crochet
hat flicking a gap ticket out the back..
jeans you bought with holes in em and dirt on em...

YOU ARE THE STORY

(drops mic and walks towards bathroom unzipping pants.. yells back)

ALL THE REST OF US HAVE ALREADY REPAIRED AND BROKEN EACH OTHERS HEARTS
ENDANGERED AND SAVED EACH OTHER'S LIVES
AND RANK ON THE DAY WE ALL WERE BORN AT THAT VERY TABLE...

LOL

(a young man comes over)
nobody ever sits that table, but everybody has once though!
next week come sit over here
i'm Con Fusion...
that guy you heard talking was Buddah

[theman080]

Its difficult for me to come in and offer solid feedback for ya shyt because I think I may miss a lot of it but regardless of that I really was feelin this peice. If I spot somethin that is off or I think may be inaccurate I'll point it out and maybe deduct for it but if I cant I just gotta go on if I liked it or not.

I felt the flow throughout, I liked how you'd bring it back to the first rhyme at certain points

You're unfamiliar with the name.and
i had between two and four diamonds
to make one for myself
before you came in
.
...where i rate on that scale
depends on who i knew before you knew
i was amongst the who's who
of this
uber-favoritist matrix...

Like I like how that whole thing read, and near the end it was pretty hot too, I was diggin the middle, part of it seemed like a set of subliminals aimed at someone but I was feelin the vibe of it...I also liked the end where you were speakin on the two musicians and shyt. Basically, you got imagery and wording downpat and ya flow is straight, i was really liking this one.



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[In$ane $hane]

i liked it, da lil like chilled calm story tellin vibe,everything...on da right beat(sort of something like da kanye-Ill be late for that,kno wat i mean)dis would be crack

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[#1rapper]

i liked this piece..there were some points where i was reading just to read it though..like i wasn't 100% into it..i admit some of it may of went above my head but let me point out the good shyt that i liked

Your flow was honestly someting new to me, and i liked it..it was good storytelling matched by flow which is hard to do consistently,

Theres nothing in thie piece that made me stop and say wtf is this about...props on this

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[W.I.Z.E.]

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let me tell you the story of two musicians
they were poets really
who didn't know they knew each other
till the world got small when they were singled out
of a scennnnnneeeeeeeee
happening spots, crowds were small
but you had your own click.. they'd spot eachother
regulars
but saw each other less
as we were fed them
through magazzzzzzzinesssss
hey joan, hey mr. tamborinnneee
hey SEEN, hey Obey
lookie there it's lorca with salvitore Dali....


I'm not gonna even try to always get you kid...or ACT like I do. The part above was cool to me. Reminded me of Ghostface. I lilke other parts but then overall I was like where is he going with this. Is he referring to his last piece when he says?

well, the thing is that you came HERE for the story

SO
WHAT?


To that you can own your destiny!
you're the one standing here with a crochet
hat flicking a gap ticket out the back..
jeans you bought with holes in em and dirt on em...



And honestly I couldn't figure it out. In that regard...someone else may totally get it and it resonates. For me I don't get it. It seems too complex and so it doesn't resonate.



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[Midnite]

i'm sober, but when I read your work Sleeps, sometimes I question that...am i reading this write, am I somehow missing the flow, is there a flow?

after a few rereads, i find that it doesn't matter to me if i catch it all, its schizo, its interesting, and it holds my attention, so in that regard you succeed

but i honestly don't know how to rate this but besides if it entertained me, and what impression it left on me....this had a very ghostface vibe, laid back and just saying what comes to mind at the time....

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[IvIdividual]

What the hell just happened? A Buddah and Con collabo under the radars????

:: takes deep breath ::

Something about this peice seemed strangely familiar. Its all about SOHH. I know that but it was something else.

I was captivated for some reason. Maybe it was the oddity of it. Maybe it was the seemingly nonsense that actualy made sense. All i know is whoever wrote this can predict the future because..."
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You're going to come in here
skim through the first paragraph
then the scroll bar is going to
fall and climb back up
like the spy outside with suction cups
.
...to know how you should rate this..."

Maybe the two people who inspired this peice are so intellegent that society labels them autistic. I dont know.

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