Untitled: 1/16/06 SpokenWord Joint - Easier to Say...

[sexydeltagirl]

Maybe it's just me...
But it's easier for me to turn this into some words about love....
Than hate...
It's easier for me to say he was my moon and my stars....
And like the stars sometimes when in his presence my eyes twinkled...
Yet when I try to explain his sudden departure...
And the black spot he left on my heart.
The words won't write themselves...
They appear like braile....
I can't find the right amount of Fukk you, I hate you, Why you do this to me?
But if I remininse on his kiss...
The way he damn, I can't think of the next verse...
Hell yeah I can, who am I kidding....
The way he kissed me just right...
Sucked on my bottom lip like a pacifier...
He needed no instructions on how to read or carefully assemble my body...
Cause like the game Operation where-ever he placed his tongue...
A loud sound went off and my nose turned red...
He's was so sadomasochistic, damn near intoxicating me with his....
Yet he hurt me...
Left me questioning my beauty, my feminitity...
So much uncertainity on whether he ever gave a fukk about me...
Ah ha! there's that word I've been looking for!
FUKK!
Why can't I seem to remember him as a jerk, a selfish prick an asshole?!
But what I do know is that it's easier to say...
I have more love for this man than hate....

[Nadira...Rare]

Woooooo!!!! Damn I love this.... I told you you always know exactly what I going thru.... I think you're writing the story of my life.... This was great tho damn much love

[Dmac]

Damn.... Im sorry i just dont know how to say everything im thinkin bout this right here...all i can say is...damn

[sexydeltagirl]

Awww thanks guys! I really appreciate your feedback...I haven't had the chance to perform this yet but I will soon hopefully....

[Cali_Bud]

You know I'm a fan! You stay with the hotness lol. Nice drop Deltagirl keep doing yur thing

[sexydeltagirl]

You know I'm a fan! You stay with the hotness lol. Nice drop Deltagirl keep doing yur thing
Aye you! thank for the love - you know I am it's only right lol - you as well

[Urban001]

I luv it. Keep bringing the real.


http://urban-city.net

[sexydeltagirl]

I luv it. Keep bringing the real.
http://urban-city.net
Thanks for checkin this joint out - no doubt!

[Mr.November+]

That was amazing....I could feel the emotion thru the screen...

[sexydeltagirl]

That was amazing....I could feel the emotion thru the screen...
:blush: why thank you, I'm glad you could feel my pain/fustration through these words.
Thanks for peepin this joint...

[energy]

Best thing that I've peeped from you yet. Way more imagery and far less literal explanation. Still woulda been nice to see you be less chained to the facts but some glimmers of that were;

"I can't find the right amount of Fukk you"

"Sucked on my bottom lip like a pacifier...
He need no instructions on how to read or carefully assemble my body...
Cause like the game Operation where-ever he placed his tongue...
A loud sound went off and my nose turned red..." this needs to be a giggled line I think.

"But what I do know is that it's easier to say...
I have more love for this man than hate...." Booyah!

lol... powerless to love. The submission is welcomed and the pain is endured as a stinging reminder of his touch. You could've been sharper but this one will cut when drawn across the wrist.

[sexydeltagirl]

Best thing that I've peeped from you yet. Way more imagery and far less literal explanation. Still woulda been nice to see you be less chained to the facts but some glimmers of that were;
"I can't find the right amount of Fukk you"
"Sucked on my bottom lip like a pacifier...
He need no instructions on how to read or carefully assemble my body...
Cause like the game Operation where-ever he placed his tongue...
A loud sound went off and my nose turned red..." this needs to be a giggled line I think.
"But what I do know is that it's easier to say...
I have more love for this man than hate...." Booyah!
lol... powerless to love. The submission is welcomed and the pain is endured as a stinging reminder of his touch. You could've been sharper but this one will cut when drawn across the wrist.
I've been around here for a minute I encourage you to check out some of my older work and let me know what you think....

Yeah after reading over it I get what you are saying. I honestly don't think I should have taken it in a sexual direction...

Thanks for checking it out....

[energy]

"Yeah after reading over it I get what you are saying. I honestly don't think I should have taken it in a sexual direction..."

I thought the exact same thing but figured it was a choice that was yours to make. I did read it and think, "Awe man, this was stronger without that."

"But what I do know is that it's easier to say...
I have more love for this man than hate...."

I could be wrong but if I'm allowed to speculate;
It looks like you came up with that part and used it as the inspiration for the piece. I think if you tagged up on that idea more throughout the piece, for yourself not in the poem, I think if you reminded yourself of that inspiration more frequently while writing this, I think it would have veered off course less and been more powerful. Like a point when it gets sharpened.

[sexydeltagirl]

"Yeah after reading over it I get what you are saying. I honestly don't think I should have taken it in a sexual direction..."

I thought the exact same thing but figured it was a choice that was yours to make. I did read it and think, "Awe man, this was stronger without that."

"But what I do know is that it's easier to say...
I have more love for this man than hate...."

I could be wrong but if I'm allowed to speculate;
It looks like you came up with that part and used it as the inspiration for the piece. I think if you tagged up on that idea more throughout the piece, for yourself not in the poem, I think if you reminded yourself of that inspiration more frequently while writing this, I think it would have veered off course less and been more powerful. Like a point when it gets sharpened.

You would be right sir in assuming that - it was the inspiration for the piece and I think I took a sexual turn cause and not to get personal that was pretty much what it (the relationship) should have been left as so to speak...

But if I would have stepped back and tried to focus on the emotions behind why I felt they way I did I could have made it much more powerful...

Thanks for the input I'll try to stay on course next time :)

[ROB-BROWN]

i feel u 100.... i felt the same aout my ex- girl i've read some of your poetry and i like how you drop your words ,keep em commin

[sexydeltagirl]

i feel u 100.... i felt the same aout my ex- girl i've read some of your poetry and i like how you drop your words ,keep em commin
Hey there, welcome and thanks for the love - it's much appreciated!