die slow

[Trojanman]

i f*cking hate you
all treating me like sh!t
disrespecting me and belittling me
for no f*cking reason
i really f*cking hate you
do this for me
die slow
die a painful and slow death
your life was never meant to be sh!t
you love seeing me down and sh!t
you want to put me down without me getting back at you
so die f*cking slow
i hope you have a heart attack
or a blood vessel in your brain explodes
or you get into a car wreck and die slowly from your injuries
b!tch, if i could have my way
i'd kill you
i'd take a shotgun and blow your f*cking head off
or i'll shoot you and have you at my mercy
begging me not to murder your ass
i'll be all smiling and grinning
because i'm the man in control
your life is in my hands
and you ain't sh!t to me
****** ass coward
that's what you get for doing that sh!t to me
you ain't sh!t
you treat people the way you want to be treat
so dry your eyes, time to die b!tch

i hate you, i hate you, i hate you
i f*cking hate you
you thought you was funny all cracking jokes on me
but look at you now
ignoring me, acting like i'm retarded playing me out
f*ck you ******
i stab you the f*ck up
get stabbed the f*ck up
now you bleeding, leaking, all wondering why i did this to you
you started it
shoulda never f*cked with me
shoulda never f*cked with my feelings
i am sensitive
and i'm a lot of things
but when you f*cking hurt me
you know i had to hurt you back
and i can't get at you verbally
and if i do, i know you'd wanna get violent
i'm afraid of you trying to get violent with me
i'm pissed with you
so when you mix those sh!ts up
i turn to the way i feel i can get my revenge and f*ck you up
so i got a gun
and pulling it on you
they say violence ain't the answer
but i gotta do what i gotta do
even if that means i gotta kill you
and block you out my memory
feel no remorse
and make myself emotionless or careless when i see your family and people in tears
crying because they wanna know who did this
if you were alive, you would have blamed it on yourself

[Bronx, NY, USA Lanes]

Wow. Imma need time to absorb this one.

I have the feeling that some of this is directed to the unknown. Like it's not yourself or people you know that you hate, it's more people that you don't know. You're assuming everyone outside of your circle is dangerous, violent, and that they want to see you down.

You could prolly cut this up into three seperate peices too. Check out this songs ...
Chimaira - Stigmurder
http://darklyrics.com/lyrics/chimaira/theimpossibilityofreason.html#9
okay that to me is not that great of a song, but when I read your poem, I was thinking of this group. It's always good to keep the emotion raw, but at the same time, constrain what's written. Gotta have some kind of flow and shape to the written work.

Overall, great emoption with strong and direct language. The chaotic thoughts match the poems untamed structure.

[Trojanman]

Wow. Imma need time to absorb this one.

I have the feeling that some of this is directed to the unknown. Like it's not yourself or people you know that you hate, it's more people that you don't know. You're assuming everyone outside of your circle is dangerous, violent, and that they want to see you down.
You could prolly cut this up into three seperate peices too. Check out this songs ...
Chimaira - Stigmurder
http://darklyrics.com/lyrics/chimaira/theimpossibilityofreason.html#9
okay that to me is not that great of a song, but when I read your poem, I was thinking of this group. It's always good to keep the emotion raw, but at the same time, constrain what's written. Gotta have some kind of flow and shape to the written work.

Overall, great emoption with strong and direct language. The chaotic thoughts match the poems untamed structure.


yeah, 50 percent of it is towards strangers that piss me off like what happened in best buy some hours ago and the other half is some people that i knew/know. i was really angry @ the time.

[D1ck Butkus]

Wow

[pl2584]

2 many people stylin on dude. smh

[MIKE BLESS]

50 percent of it is towards strangers that piss me off like what happened in best buy some hours ago
sometimes the people that work there be makin me feel that way

[Trojanman]

sometimes the people that work there be makin me feel that way


man, best buy f*cking sucks. target would be the sh!t if those marks actually had a wide range of cds and other sh!t.

[Dmac]

wow......dat was.....wow mang.....dat was crzy ima need tym 2 take dat all in....dat was...wow....ok....inow kno i need 2 step maself up...thnx 4 da motivation iite..wow