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SEMPERFI
12-21-06, 06:37 AM
Dear Mom,
i know i never told-you-enough//
that i love you,but i do...and i hope-you-be-tough//
im proud of you ma,for raising all these kids-up-right//
even if that meant that you had to get-up-nights//
and sing the baby back to sleep cuz you would melt-when-he-cries//
but that baby was me and as i grew,i felt-i-would-die//
but not like this, in my room, by my own-gun//
ready to blow-one hole in my head,telling my self dont-run//
it was never the way you raised me,
you did just perfect//
i was just hurt-and didnt think my life was really worth-it//
dont blame yourself ma, your a hard working mother-of-four//
i didnt wanna suffer-no-more, just be glad i didnt have to
suffer-through-war//
i couldnt take living here,hearing shots-everynight//
id rather be at home being chased by the cops-everynight//
ma i love you, its about time-to-be-gettin//
on with this whole thing...dont worry,ill find-you-in-heavin//
i know the bible says youll go to hell for takin-your-life//
but i killed an Iraqian today now im just makin-it-right//
a life for a life, no matter how evil-their-soul//
their human too mom, and their people-you-know?//
i cant live knowing i took away somebodys-baby//
so now im going to put good use to this gun-that-they-gave-me//
and erase one killer from the face-of-this-earth//
i know these words are probobly just makin-it-hurt//
but ma,i have to go now,my hand-is-sore//
tell president bush that Josh said "Damn-this-War"//
im just a contract murderer, hired-by-Bush//
im sick of killing,but suddenly im not to tired-to-push//
this trigger, that is pressed-to-my-temple//
god wont send me to hell,
i heard if you kill for others safety then i guess-he'll-accept-you//

Love you ma...
"BLAM BLAM"

Advent Verbal Kent
12-21-06, 11:35 AM
...So Serious!


AvK

Cali_Bud
12-24-06, 09:41 PM
Man people have to start leaving feedback.... this is a great concept and a good song. Keep doing your thing man!:yes:

Erica Johnson
12-31-06, 03:58 PM
That was definitely an emotionally-filled piece, I really liked it. You know? It provided all kinds of imagery. I don't know a lot about writing structures, but I like how you highlighted the emphasized points. It makes it easier to flow and recite it as you write.

MaCRonI
01-01-07, 01:14 AM
This qauklity material fam, woerrd up....I lilove the concpet the direction, the flow...the message!!! wich was strong and potenti n its own eayu..relevant to what some soldeirs maybe feeling right now......keep droppin' and peep my Jungle love jonit........then holla at me for a collab!!!!

8/10

Advent Verbal Kent
01-01-07, 04:10 PM
This qauklity material fam, woerrd up....I lilove the concpet the direction, the flow...the message!!! wich was strong and potenti n its own eayu..relevant to what some soldeirs maybe feeling right now......keep droppin' and peep my Jungle love jonit........then holla at me for a collab!!!!
8/10


Yo...put down the yak man. You starting to see doubles. Nah I'm playin. This kid Whoo Raah aka SemperFi got some skills.

Child Proof
01-02-07, 12:50 PM
Damn, definitely felt this!