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MaCRonI
11-24-06, 12:47 AM
Aight Ya'll....you know how a true lyricist do!!!! all ya'll crabs betta sit back and watch this.....keystylin' at its finest!!!!:king:


Blanks screen disappears as the camera reels/
Cinematic motion picture comes to life; ya'll know the deals/
Zoom into the linen ocean of your thanksgiving meals/
The table is the globe, scent of its islands slowly arose/
They slither throw the air and then surrounds ya nose/
I'll go continent by continent, going by each countries prominence/
Describin’ each of their components, display how we conquered it/
Floating islands eaten to silence, our stomach's favorite sport/
Giving the mahogany world relief, destroyed by dental pitchforks/
So let’s start with the view that's panoramic, our demographics/
The geographic of the white mushroom similar to Austrialia/
Not mixture from the potato’s genitalia, country with a failure/
To come together, the blacks offended as mostly white descendents/
Came out when their potato parents was severally indented/
At first food racism, a cast system, their traces were left/
Peeled of, so for African Americans it meant instant death/
But times change, blacks population less suppressed/
Their genes expressed, so from oven-cooked slavery/
They went to making the white culture savory/
Surrounds Caucasians as ponds of golden brown gravy/
So they'd submerge all the whites hateful words/
So they were one, as the camera lens could observe/
But soon they were canoeing down a throat, a darker moat/
Saliva Soak, despite the harder strokes, sunk the gravy boat/
But all was done when their little islands was consumed/
A giggling uvula was the streetlight towards their doom/

MaCRonI
11-24-06, 03:45 PM
C'mon ya'll.....feed please?

In$ane $hane
11-24-06, 04:51 PM
yea dats shyt is kool

MaCRonI
11-26-06, 07:34 PM
^^Thanks...i'm dyin' for more feed though!!!!

Verbinh
11-28-06, 07:51 PM
For some feedback, the vintage 1,2 punch isn't going to cut it.


First and foremost; i must include the almighty adage, "IN MY MOST HUMBLE OF OPINIONS..." If you can make atleast three syllables rhyme for the entire verse and still include your geo-political stance on it, then i will give you daps. This is not a knock, what you got is good.

I think you could take this to an open-mic night at your school and get a nice subtle applause. But here at open mic (considering its lineage and past excellence), we expect a lot and I want to see potential maximized (and you got the touch, no homo).

To inspire you some, throw on some JR Writer, pun, fabolous, AZ... those are the best multi-syllable spitters in the game and i get all my influence from them.


Get at me...

#1rapper
11-28-06, 07:57 PM
For some feedback, the vintage 1,2 punch isn't going to cut it.
First and foremost; i must include the almighty adage, "IN MY MOST HUMBLE OF OPINIONS..." If you can make atleast three syllables rhyme for the entire verse and still include your geo-political stance on it, then i will give you daps. This is not a knock, what you got is good.
I think you could take this to an open-mic night at your school and get a nice subtle applause. But here at open mic (considering its lineage and past excellence), we expect a lot and I want to see potential maximized (and you got the touch, no homo).
To inspire you some, throw on some JR Writer, pun, fabolous, AZ... those are the best multi-syllable spitters in the game and i get all my influence from them.
Get at me...

co-sign

yaga
11-28-06, 10:33 PM
Dude has something with describing things... real surreal. Thing is this flopped, ie you gave up it seems... the set up for what was about to drop seemed huge, you know? Didn't think you hit all the bases maybe? I dunno.

Gotta come back to this, reread it but like i said, on first glance just seemed like you stopped too soon.

...and uh, gimme some input about the potatoes, man. What's the all about? I know Thanksgiving includes them, but where'd you take it?

GREAT concept.

MaCRonI
11-28-06, 11:25 PM
Ayo, i'm just beginin' yo...good lookin' ya'll..i've been dyin' for some feed, but ay.....I'll get at ya'll when I drops part II.....

MaCRonI
12-02-06, 04:14 PM
what up yo..more feed please?