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Atticus
11-20-06, 01:18 PM
I tripped the velvet curtain de midnight matinee;
Finalimenté, entrée bowing eyelids take your mark.
The theater is set for an audience solitary,
play on maestro.

Act 0: Scene -2
Final acts tumble into misshapen introductions;
The orchestra lends a drum roll atop silhouettes
of the church mouse's violin solo;
Black sheep parade under the veil
of a broken abacus.

Act I, II, III, meta IV
Que house lights

The audience returns for the encore presentation.
Stretched across the aisle floor,
I yawned with the stench strangers foot
tiptoeing my swollen tonsils.
Stumbling inside an intermission I shook the shadow's hands;
He spoke of the Shakespearean era
in forgotten tongues against a blank looking glass.
Character nod's in awe

Act VI: Scene Midnight
I tried to sing along,
but the improvisational melody was lost;
so I sat on the curb picking stars from the window sill
on my forehead.

The black sheep stood front phantom of the opera
Dragging backdrops of jigsaw thought across
the marble silence.

The sheep fade into applause as the audience's feet
sweep the laps of counterfeit smiles.

Act VI: Scene 5
Dim house lights

An elephant's ballet pirouettes the shattered champagne glass
Quick breath, relax before crescendo

Across the falling bows of the orchestra's dream sequence
we act as if tomorrow couldn't see.
The curtain's pretentious hold til' infinity
As wilting eye lashes trickle across the anvil,
the lion's paw inhales shrapnel spit by splintering deliriums.
Open eyes wide; Yell in frustration.

Se7en O'clock showing: take your seats

Satin curtains drift the runners of capillary centerfolds;
Black sheep masquerades outline the bloodshot
in an unlearned manifesto,
while the actors swallow midnight applause under the sunrise
of a flutist's final solo.
Hold hands, take final bows

Act Ř: Scene XII

Memorizing lines of unwritten opera house:
tonight was yesteryears copycat production;
I'll read you on the shards of another midnight screenplay
goodmorning night.

The final act has yet to come.

... entrée

Abs_inth da prophet
11-25-06, 12:34 PM
your desire to find the most abstract connection in metaphor is a detriment to the reader..the deeper you go the further away you travel from a cohesive cognitive train of thought...and I think it serves to distance the reader
but that being said...I love shiit like that...lol

Across the falling bows of the orchestra's dream sequence
we act as if tomorrow couldn't see.

that's a beautiful line right there... :yes:

("the curtains hold til infinity")

you have quite a few
jems in ya..

keep droppin..cause the more I see your stuff the better grasp I'll have of you as a writer.

Nadira...Rare
12-03-06, 05:52 PM
your desire to find the most abstract connection in metaphor is a detriment to the reader..the deeper you go the further away you travel from a cohesive cognitive train of thought...and I think it serves to distance the reader
but that being said...I love shiit like that...lol
that's a beautiful line right there... :yes:
("the curtains hold til infinity")
you have quite a few
jems in ya..
keep droppin..cause the more I see your stuff the better grasp I'll have of you as a writer.

I definetly agree with you Abs... I did have to read this piece a couple of times buut once I got it I loves it... You know I'm a lil slow when it comes to abstract stuff but this is good shyt keep it coming

Atticus
12-20-06, 05:43 PM
I didn't know this had gotten any responces. I'll get a bit more active.

IvI~iki ruka~IvI
12-21-06, 03:00 PM
No doubt man...this was an interesting drop right here. It had a certain sophistication that ive grown to love in a poem, rhyme, or whatever you want to label it.

Keep droppin man. Your work would add dynamics to this here poetry family.


IvI