Untitled: Karma and I - Hmmmmmm!

[sexydeltagirl]

I left him in dereliction - hand extented trying to grip my jacket...
I just walked away and didn't look back...
He called my name, not once but twice...
I let his voice ricochet off my back....
And mix with the clicking of my heels against the pavement....
And not once did the thought cross my mind that Karma will have her way with me...
She'll have her revenge one of these days...
And before I could sink my teeth into his throat and drain his blood...
She struck....
I had fallen and couldn't grab a life preserver....
I didn't even notice that this was my punishment....
Wrapped up in analyzing thinking I wasn't good enough...
Not knowing that carelessly...
I lead many sheep to the slaughter...
For not wearing the proper attire or being too attached to my inviting spirit or just not giving me that special something that makes me wanna call again - send an im saying " I was just thinking about you"....
Oh but that day when he said please just go away...
I knew that I had been served dessert and the taste quite bitter....
He slapped me in the face without touching me...
Stomped on my pride without even lifting his foot....
So I laughed a little when I was given my dismissal....
He asked why do you chuckle?
I said thank you for being a man....
I had this coming...
Karma, you slick, slick entity....
I admit defeat!

[sexydeltagirl]

ha!

[Irish-dipstick]

i feel u on the whole karma aspect but i dont understand some of the things you was talking about....then when i try to read it again something strange happened like a bermuda triangle effect...i was at the start then the end all of a sudden....weird....:huh:

nice drop though props:king:

[sexydeltagirl]

i feel u on the whole karma aspect but i dont understand some of the things you was talking about....then when i try to read it again something strange happened like a bermuda triangle effect...i was at the start then the end all of a sudden....weird....:huh:
nice drop though props:king:
lol, hey babes - I read it again 2 and I twirked it a little bit to make the flow a little better and easier for folks to understand hopefully...If you don't I can break it down for you....:)

Thanks for the peeping this joint though....

[Irish-dipstick]

lol, hey babes - I read it again 2 and I twirked it a little bit to make the flow a little better and easier for folks to understand hopefully...If you don't I can break it down for you....:)
Thanks for the peeping this joint though....

nah u dont need ta break it down thanx anyways i got it now just got through it i love the last lines really gave me closure on this lol...for real though good ass poem girl keep shaking

[Enlil]

I read a lot of your stuff here. Your style is so abstract and raw... I love it...


Keep pumpin weights with that pen sweetie.

[sexydeltagirl]

nah u dont need ta break it down thanx anyways i got it now just got through it i love the last lines really gave me closure on this lol...for real though good ass poem girl keep shaking
Okay, yeah I didn't want to leave you confused...lol Thanks for the compliment means a lot to me....

[sexydeltagirl]

I read a lot of your stuff here. Your style is so abstract and raw... I love it...
Keep pumpin weights with that pen sweetie.
:blush: Thanks I appreciate the love - I enjoy your word as well - you inspire me with your words which is the highest form of flattery imo....

Yeah I will and you do the same - you have an audience :)

[Advent Verbal Kent]

I read a lot of your stuff here. Your style is so abstract and raw... I love it...
Keep pumpin weights with that pen sweetie.


I always felt that SxDG was far from abstract. I can agree on the raw part. Her pieces alway came off as a "play by play" of whatever happened or whatever she was feeling at the moment. I never really had to dig to get the basic meaning or whatever relates to my life, from her poems. Its usually smooth reading with tons of raw emotion. Maybe its just my perspective.

Anyways. Nice piece.


AvK

[sexydeltagirl]

I always felt that SxDG was far from abstract. I can agree on the raw part. Her pieces alway came off as a "play by play" of whatever happened or whatever she was feeling at the moment. I never really had to dig to get the basic meaning or whatever relates to my life, from her poems. Its usually smooth reading with tons of raw emotion. Maybe its just my perspective.
Anyways. Nice piece.
AvK
Hey thanks for the feedback - And I kinda agree with you. I think what makes my pieces cool to folks is that I put it in a way that's easy for them to understand. You don't have to go searching for a deep meaning it's just is what it is, or if it is a deeper meaning by the 2nd time you've read it you'll find it. I've read pieces from folks who take the abstract approach and find myself competely lost by the second line. But I guess that what makes writing great - you can develop your own interpetation...

Thanks again....

[Abs_inth da prophet]

Hey thanks for the feedback - Thanks again....
SDG has a beautiful style...
AVK just judges from a writers perspective and can't get past the fact that he would do it somewhat differently..
so his stubborness won't allow him to completely jive with it..
What I like about the style is that it has an openess to it...
it's very inviting..
and truthful...doesn't try too hard..it's gentle..
it's like damn near the easiest shiit to like by the most people....LoL.
me...shiet...the stuff I write doesn't givafuk about you (the reader)
you gotta get in where ya fit..