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Irish-dipstick
11-07-06, 05:50 PM
how can i survive in suicide city
i just heard a dude hung himself
thats as common as the cold
only 18 yrs old my friend to his life
hung himself in an abondoned building
dam he had propects in his life
and dam i used to play sports with him as kid
but as we grew old i never spoke to him again
until i hit my high school on a cold september
tried to fit in he tookme in like shelters in the winter
i was mad proud dude was start as fcuk
but never look down always looked up
never frowned only once when that fcuking ***** messed him around
but thats human reaction im trapped in this traction
of different faction everyday goes by but another life subtracted
and it aint like we all killing each other we killing ourselves
over stressful lifes of adults who passed to motion
a knew another dude throw his body into the ocean
i quote bac to where i belong under the sun
no-one can hurt my now im in the hands of gods son
dam ad's i didn't really know you didn't even show you was foe
but i still feel like i ow you but thats just the way
when you see a familar face no more
its like a chapter over like the closer of my closet door.......

Irish-dipstick
11-10-06, 01:15 PM
wats popping im upping

Irish-dipstick
11-12-06, 10:50 AM
upping for comments ppl :P :king:

Mr.November+
11-14-06, 11:13 AM
Feeling this...

"but thats human reaction im trapped in this traction
of different faction everyday goes by but another life subtracted
and it aint like we all killing each other we killing ourselves
over stressful lifes of adults who passed to motion"


Thats was very good....

Irish-dipstick
11-14-06, 05:02 PM
Feeling this...
"but thats human reaction im trapped in this traction
of different faction everyday goes by but another life subtracted
and it aint like we all killing each other we killing ourselves
over stressful lifes of adults who passed to motion"
Thats was very good....

thanxz for the peep comment up

sexydeltagirl
11-14-06, 10:32 PM
Hey, you getting really good at this writing thing - lol I could hear these words spoken over a real dope beat esp. this part...

i was mad proud dude was start as fcuk
but never look down always looked up
never frowned only once when that fcuking ***** messed him around
but thats human reaction im trapped in this traction
of different faction everyday goes by but another life subtracted

Dopeness!!

Irish-dipstick
11-15-06, 05:33 AM
Hey, you getting really good at this writing thing - lol I could hear these words spoken over a real dope beat esp. this part...
i was mad proud dude was start as fcuk
but never look down always looked up
never frowned only once when that fcuking ***** messed him around
but thats human reaction im trapped in this traction
of different faction everyday goes by but another life subtracted
Dopeness!!

Thanx for the comment im glad u think im getting better...:rolleyes:....appreciated

Marie 03
12-14-06, 01:24 AM
i agree with them that was my favorite part of the piece

struck a chord with me, i lost someone very close to me from suicide

sexydeltagirl
12-14-06, 11:00 AM
Thanx for the comment im glad u think im getting better...:rolleyes:....appreciated
I didn't mean for you to take it that way - but I've noticed that you are paiting a better picture that's all - As writers we are all a work in progress!

:)

Irish-dipstick
12-14-06, 02:55 PM
I didn't mean for you to take it that way - but I've noticed that you are paiting a better picture that's all - As writers we are all a work in progress!
:)

lol what way ???lol :ohmy: :laugh: