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Marie 03
10-09-06, 11:49 PM
Hey all. I've been lurking on here for a while, but haven't posted anything yet. I went all the way back to page one and have read about 90% of the poems on here. I wanted to pay my dues so to speak before I posted anything on here.

I thought I would start off by posting the poem that got me into poetry. It was an AP English assignment in 12th grade in 2003 that I did in about 5 minutes before the bell rang. We had to write about an awakening and I decided to do a little flip on it.

Bubble

Like a rooster waking before sunrise
My soul has finally risen
The plastic bubble around me has been popped,
and suddenly, I’m not protected anymore.

My smile has gone schizophrenic with new personalities-
frown, smirk, astonishment, sadness
are seen everyday across my visage.
Words and phrases touch my clean ears
like scalding coals.
Images and visions
scar my green eyes, marring their clarity.

I want my bubble back!

Send my smile back to therapy
to lose the other personalities, I only want one.
Give me ice to cool the burns
But that would all be too easy.

The scars on my eyes won’t fade
They are no longer naive
I’m growing out of my bubble world.
Look at the yellow flecks
drowning in emerald.
My eyes show I’ve changed.

I can never go back.

Abs_inth da prophet
10-10-06, 01:05 AM
WELCOME!

we appreciate new artists round these parts and your contributions are a welcome breath of fresh air...

feel free to continue to drop your joints in here and I'm sure the love will grow as others become more acclimated with your work & your persona..

We'll be waiting and I'll be watchin.

peace.

Marie 03
10-10-06, 01:08 AM
WELCOME!
we appreciate new artists round these parts and your contributions are a welcome breath of fresh air...
feel free to continue to drop your joints in here and I'm sure the love will grow as others become more acclimated with your work & your persona..
We'll be waiting and I'll be watchin.
peace.

Thanks for the warm welcome. I've been a fan of your stuff while I was reading the back pages. You write some awesome stuff so thanks for taking to time to check mine out.

sexydeltagirl
10-10-06, 03:01 AM
Hey There,

Let me piggyback on Abs. and extend another warm welcome to the corner. Please don't make it a passing visit - take your shoes off and get comfortable.

May your work continue to take your places you never dreamed they would and take others along for the ride...

Much peace to you....

Marie 03
10-10-06, 03:10 AM
Hey There,
Let me piggyback on Abs. and extend another warm welcome to the corner. Please don't make it a passing visit - take your shoes off and get comfortable.
May your work continue to take your places you never dreamed they would and take others along for the ride...
Much peace to you....

again thanks for the warm welcome.

I think its amazing that my first 2 comments on here are coming from 2 of the top poets in these parts. thanks again!

Absolut da poet
10-10-06, 03:18 AM
creativity develops inspiration...
and vice versa...so if I'm good...then it's because you inspire me..
..all writers...and all their work..

everyone should come to a point where they can appreciate even the most subtle and delicate things..

so with that being said...we welcome the addition of new inspiration..
and we hope to also inspire you..so we can all grow together..

keep droppin'...get comfy and all that good stuff..

one love.

Advent Verbal Kent
10-10-06, 01:25 PM
Sliding through to welcome you aswell. Stay for a while.


AvK

Marie 03
10-11-06, 07:06 PM
Sliding through to welcome you aswell. Stay for a while.
AvK

Thanks AVK, i plan on doing that

Nasty Manny
10-18-06, 04:51 AM
nice drop baby

Marie 03
10-18-06, 03:57 PM
thanks manny