Untitled... I Caught Feelings

[sexydeltagirl]

I didn't mean to allow my heart to open up so quickly...
Like instantly I was wondering what it would be like to be your girl....
Doing those wifey things like cooking and cleaning...
Meeting you at the door in lingerie....
I feel for something that won't go anywhere...
But when I'm with you my emotions are everywhere...
I don't know rather to smile or laugh...
To inhale; exhale at the same time....
My stomach feels a little uneasy...
Like I put bad mayo on my sandwich....
We talk all night on the phone...
Like our mouth have diarrhea....
The clocks ticks....
It was 1am last time I checked and now it's 6am...
You spit verses that make my head spin...
You are so talented...
With each word that comes from your lips...
My feelings grow deeper....
Penetrating to the very fabric of my being...
Your voice shines light onto my soul...
I'm perplexed with your intentions...
Saying you miss me "a lot"...
Took me back for a second...
Cause you are always so calm and collected...
I took that and ran with it...
Letting you know that I've thought about you every day since...
I caught feelings...
When the only feeling I should have experienced...
Was regret.....

SMH

[Advent Verbal Kent]

Damn. Bad Mayo??? Like our mouth have diarrhea?!? That must be SOME . Nah. I'm playin. This was nice...even with the lack of finnesse.


AvK

[sexydeltagirl]

Damn. Bad Mayo??? Like our mouth have diarrhea?!? That must be SOME . Nah. I'm playin. This was nice...even with the lack of finnesse.
AvK

lol, thanks for peeping this joint ...

[ONE_MIC_ETERNAL]

Damn. Bad Mayo??? Like our mouth have diarrhea?!? That must be SOME . Nah. I'm playin. This was nice...even with the lack of finnesse.
AvK

I AGREE.


I didn't mean to allow my heart to open up so quickly...
Like instantly I was wondering what it would be like to be your girl....
Doing those wifey things like cooking and cleaning...
Meeting you at the door in lingerie....


Give, detail, why did your heart open so quickly?
what did he do that brought an instant attraction,
how was the setting, why did you dream of those
wife things..

I see that you just jotted this down and thats good, atleast
your writing. But, I feel you can do better. I honestly
think you just read threads about masterbating
and jerking off before you wrote this. And, I think
I've seen you in the Ladies forum, So God help you,
because if you want to do serious poetry, then
you will need to write as if you are not in the
ladies forum and just get into the exactness
of what this jotting is, and make a better poem.

Honestly, I write like shiit, but I will be hard on you
cause, your wanting it..


Work on it baby, and when your done..I'll
read it again.

[sexydeltagirl]

I AGREE.
Give, detail, why did your heart open so quickly?
what did he do that brought an instant attraction,
how was the setting, why did you dream of those
wife things..
I see that you just jotted this down and thats good, atleast
your writing. But, I feel you can do better. I honestly
think you just read threads about masterbating
and jerking off before you wrote this. And, I think
I've seen you in the Ladies forum, So God help you,
because if you want to do serious poetry, then
you will need to write as if you are not in the
ladies forum and just get into the exactness
of what this jotting is, and make a better poem.
Honestly, I write like shiit, but I will be hard on you
cause, your wanting it..
Work on it baby, and when your done..I'll
read it again.

Ummm thanks for your feedback - this is just some randomness that I decided to share...lol naw I didn't peep a thread about masturbating or jerking off before dropping this - it just popped into my head like most things I post....In a few of my other joints I go into detail but some I just leave as I see them in my head and this is one of them...

Maybe I'll give more detail on another piece - I can only go where my mind/heart leads me....

[Walt Frazier]

did you just use "smh" in a poem?

[sexydeltagirl]

did you just use "smh" in a poem?
:laugh: naw that's not apart of the poem - I was smh after I read it...