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MaCRonI
09-19-06, 11:48 PM
Ya'll ni99az gotta feed this **** main break it down or somethin'..this drop right here somethin' rarely seen on SOHH....:king:

Contemplatin',Lookin up into a sunset sky, clouds drift by/
a tie-die of bloody red, yellow range, and sky/
blue, a variation multiple hues, sun still loungin' the sky as it's confused/
yank at clouds as they go by, on the move, tryin'/
not fall down below the horizon, buyin'/
a few more minutes up in the atmosphere/
hatin' the monment gouly cousin will here/
at most, try not to fear,reminsce of its hours as a glowin' sphere/
beamin' down solar rays, Ultraviolet shards that graze/
and give out sunburn like foodsamples at Wal-Mart/
Food Stamps flooded thorught the street's heart/
Special pens with razor sharp balpoints/
with Comapny insignias, given tha simila/
ways in which it ducks behind the appalchian mountains/
anxius the hours which it'll come out in, and awaken/
gettin' man into the endeavors it's undertaken/
but still hsaken, when the moon give's it a hollow glance/
eyes tellin' it not chance a peep over the skyline/
and keep ideas of alwasy shini'n out of his mind/
but just like the courageous, it rises to the challenge/
and thus, moon and sun exchange postion in nonviolence/
and the sun radiates to give warmth to all the oceans and islands/
scares way the shadows on the highlands/
opposite of the moons pull on the earth's tidal waves/
climbs above the pave,breaks its shackles as doubt's devout slave/

Wordsmyth
09-20-06, 02:35 PM
Good work, nice visual images.. Flow was pretty much money...

MESO
09-20-06, 03:24 PM
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Thanks
We all spokes in this cycle
Speaking reflects how crazy
The chords noise is vital
Given African feedback like Michael
Odds set against the clockwise motion
Sohh relative he let go of the notion
And marched a 100 strong playing brass
Studied books got off his ass
Gave me the pass, kept me hoping
The torch passed on
Cornelius sohh saintly stayed strong
Faith works was the song
Knowing good and well where he's from
To that we owe many thanks
Now we can sit upon the banks
Earn interest from the message
And never say we can't
God's grace is what he paints
An angelo amongst the aint's
O Lord how we got by
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MaCRonI
09-20-06, 08:34 PM
good lookin' on the feed ya'll....

MaCRonI
09-24-06, 03:31 AM
more feedback?

MaCRonI
09-24-06, 07:27 PM
C'mon..some feed please?

Advent Verbal Kent
09-25-06, 01:06 PM
Yeah. Nice imagery. Thats about it though. No real plot. Not really any meaning to this peice IMO. Just thought jotted out.


AvK

MaCRonI
09-26-06, 12:30 AM
Oh..well, I just typed it up realc quick, i've not yet made an offical song, but I'll try to some time soon?..feed?