what's up pops?

[homeyjay]

it takes me back to that screen door
grey pourch with missing floorboards
that door never did close properly
it slammed against it's door frame
something fierce like with the wind
it would cease for a brief moment
then it would resume even louder
bam bam bam i can still hear it
i used to cringe before each slam
one day i stop paying it any mind
got use to it i figured, we all did
never been spoiled i tell ya not me
my folks would not allow that see
where i come from you have to earn
stuff like vittles and sleepin' quarters
and i mean the old fashion way too
by doing chores not no slingin' stuff
if you don' do then you don't get
is what they told us when we was youngin's
didn't like it though, but it worked
would to fo many youngin's today ya' ask me
that and a old fashion whompin' too
heck now ya' got boys lookin' like girls
with the two earrings and da braid weave
and the girls aw heck you know what i'm sayin'
nuff to make you crazy, the devil is in town yaw
i tell you it ain't nothin' but the devil
parents scared of they own kids, i swear
now that's as wrong as drinking whiskey on sunday
peoplles of authority abusing the kids and what not
i mean if you can't trust the preachers and the teachers
then we are in a big mess hear that needs fixin' fast now
kids on the computers can't even think own they're own
and now everybody's e-mailin' and textin' each other
what's wrong with that? Man they all in the same house
we acting like robots you better watch it , i mean it
now where was i? oh yeah the screen door bam bam bam ...
now did you know i had to walk to school with one shoe on
cause i brother wore the other one see we only had one pair

[Advent Verbal Kent]

Straight up....you should right a book man.

Something grabbed me in the beginning of this. Something about that door. This should be the first page to your book right here..

On the flip side....In the poetical scheme of things...I think if you start out with a rhyme you should end off that way too. Thats just my opinion.

Im declaring this post unfinished.


AvK

[homeyjay]

Straight up....you should right a book man.
Something grabbed me in the beginning of this. Something about that door. This should be the first page to your book right here..
On the flip side....In the poetical scheme of things...I think if you start out with a rhyme you should end off that way too. Thats just my opinion.
Im declaring this post unfinished.
AvK

Aiight my brother, I'll see that challenge and raise you a sequel in the near future. Thanks for the push, your comments are always appreciated, I was headed somewhere with this and didn't quite get there though ( got stuck between humor and morality).

[homeyjay]

it takes me back to that screen door
grey pourch with missing floorboards
that door never did close properly
it slammed against it's door frame
something fierce like with the wind
it would cease for a brief moment
then it would resume even louder
bam bam bam i can still hear it
i used to cringe before each slam
one day i stop paying it any mind
got use to it i figured, we all did
never been spoiled i tell ya not me
my folks would not allow that see
where i come from you have to earn
stuff like vittles and sleepin' quarters
and i mean the old fashion way too
by doing chores not no slingin' stuff
if you don' do then you don't get
is what they told us when we was youngin's
didn't like it though, but it worked
would to fo many youngin's today ya' ask me
that and a old fashion whompin' too
heck now ya' got boys lookin' like girls
with the two earrings and da braid weave
and the girls aw heck you know what i'm sayin'
never thought that I would see the day when
men went to the salon and women to the barber
nuff to make you crazy, the devil is in town yaw
i tell you it ain't nothin' but the devil
parents scared of they own kids, i swear
now that's as wrong as drinking whiskey on a sunday
people of authority abusing the kids and what not
i mean if you can't trust the preachers and the teachers
then we are in a big mess hear that needs fixin' fast now
kids on the computers can't even think own they're own
and now everybody's e-mailin' and textin' each other
what's wrong with that? Man they all in the same house
we acting like robots you better watch it , i mean it
now where was i? oh yeah the screen door bam bam bam ...
now did you know i had to walk to school with one shoe on
cause i brother wore the other one see we only had one pair

[Mr.November+]

Feeling this...some good imaginery..

[homeyjay]

Feeling this...some good imaginery..

Thanks Man, I owe you some credit though. My joint was inpired by your Phily Blues joint. Thanks for da holler.