One for a nickel & two for a dime

[homeyjay]

man i should have known
swinging for the fences
a curve was thrown
messin' up my senses
swung and missed badly
thought i made it through
but you always had me
wasn't nothin' i could do
you cut me some slack
let me loose for a while
then snatched me back
i was reduced to a child
reminded me of such
put me in my place
handed me a crutch
that made me feel safe
i'm used to being lonely
there is no other way
long as you own me
big sadness everyday
yet soon i will rise
i know you saw this
light in my eyes
that black rawness
it will devour you
and will not be denied
it'll over power you
when we do collide
destroy the chains of vice
then i'll watch you flee
start on a better life
'cause this is my decree

lil something for the brothers and sisters of the struggle - 'cause we all strugglin' with sometin'
hj

[sexydeltagirl]

man i should have known
swinging for the fences
a curve was thrown
messin' up my senses
swung and missed badly
thought i made it through
but you always had me
wasn't nothin' i could do
you cut me some slack
let me loose for a while
then snatched me back
i was reduced to a child
reminded me of such
put me in my place
handed me a crutch
that made me feel safe
i'm used to being lonely
there is no other way
long as you own me
big sadness everyday
yet soon i will rise
i know you saw this
light in my eyes
that black rawness
it will devour you
and will not be denied
it'll over power you
when we do collide
destroy the chains of vice
then i'll watch you flee
start on a better life
'cause this is my decree
lil something for the brothers and sisters of the struggle - 'cause we all strugglin' with sometin'
hj

Good drop homeyjay - I felt this one brotha....

[homeyjay]

Good drop homeyjay - I felt this one brotha....

Thanks Sexxy Dee - it's simplistic and all and I'm tryin' to get away from that, but it is from deep down though. Thank You, always appreciative of your comments.hj

[Advent Verbal Kent]

Nice flow....This part stood out to me the most. Had some power to it.

"i know you saw this
light in my eyes
that black rawness
it will devour you
and will not be denied"


Id like to see more substance from you though.

Keep diggin.



AvK

[homeyjay]

Nice flow....This part stood out to me the most. Had some power to it.
"i know you saw this
light in my eyes
that black rawness
it will devour you
and will not be denied"
Id like to see more substance from you though.
Keep diggin.
AvK

Yeah I know what you mean, thanks, it lacks that much needed tweaking.
It's like my boy alway says "don't peep dig deep".