dam shame....

[Irish-dipstick]

confused

13 years old and such a beautiful thing gving a-way
everything that belongs to her, body of a 20 year old
heart of a queen raised from the dust to ashes and
thats a beautigul thing....believe this believing that its
right but it aint if she only had a brain taken advantage
of by a stranger who molested her and her pregnant this
is crazy how you could kill a beautiful thing it wasn't yours
to take it was her choice but you only bonuced after hearing
a cop voice....stop....shots ringing in the air...child is now fatherless
this situation meessed but if i was in the position of the cop
i would have pulled the trigger and burned the ******
....now the little girl moaning and crying the cop thinks she
look like my little girl little does he know it was her ass that was in
the air....but he didn't give a fcuk he kicked her stupid b1tch what you
at you getting pregnant stupid little girl what would ya mama say
you a disgrace as he laughs while tears run down her face
now itz the next day she sleeping on the streets 9 months letter
she gave birth but the baby choked died and she died of blood lose#
what was the point of this mess.....

[Absolut da poet]

interesting....

I can see where you're going...I like it... :yes:
I'm not sure if others can or will always be able to follow you but personally I can see where you're at and where you're goin

I think you have to keep goin there with your style...keep pushing it, challenging it... and building on it... feeling it more everytime regardless of what others say even if they say nothing ...cause you definetly have something to contribute and trust me people do wanna hear it...sometimes people need to hear it.

but whatever u do...don't stop.

[Irish-dipstick]

interesting....

I can see where you're going...I like it... :yes:
I'm not sure if others can or will always be able to follow you but personally I can see where you're at and where you're goin

I think you have to keep goin there with your style...keep pushing it, challenging it... and building on it... feeling it more everytime regardless of what others say even if they say nothing ...cause you definetly have something to contribute and trust me people do wanna hear it...sometimes people need to hear it.

but whatever u do...don't stop.

thanxz for peeping my piece i respect your opinion and im glad your liking my work for real i wont stop...hommie...knowz me i wont stop but i would like to say i was feeling my piece at the start and i had the plot in my head but for some reason i got stopped in the middle and really stressed to find an ending.

peace

[Absolut da poet]

thanxz for peeping my piece i respect your opinion and im glad your liking my work for real i wont stop...hommie...knowz me i wont stop but i would like to say i was feeling my piece at the start and i had the plot in my head but for some reason i got stopped in the middle and really stressed to find an ending.

peace

i feel you there...i write 95% of my joints to audio and it's (the topic) usually about the feeling the music gives me at the time i hear it...but if I get frozen on a line/part I just leave it for the time being and move to something else until I find that inspiration again to finish the original piece..

I've found that one of the worst (writing) sins you can commit is to force your flow when it's not there just to wrap something up..

It can be tricky cause Sometimes when you go back to it you don't have that same feeling you had when you first started but that gives you an oppurtunity to get creative and blend two different vibes/thoughts/topics into one

just an idea..cause when I read your stuff I feel like you have the emotion there..the topic is good...it's not complicated..but something gets lost in the delivery..

Maybe you can play around with the arrangement of the lines more...cause your structure can get a lil choppy...I see you like to flow...so watch your sentences...sometimes they might need to be shortened to improve the flow

it's basically a puzzle...you've got the pieces...and I think you have the ability to create a very unique picture.

[Irish-dipstick]

i feel you there...i write 95% of my joints to audio and it's (the topic) usually about the feeling the music gives me at the time i hear it...but if I get frozen on a line/part I just leave it for the time being and move to something else until I find that inspiration again to finish the original piece..

I've found that one of the worst (writing) sins you can commit is to force your flow when it's not there just to wrap something up..

It can be tricky cause Sometimes when you go back to it you don't have that same feeling you had when you first started but that gives you an oppurtunity to get creative and blend two different vibes/thoughts/topics into one

just an idea..cause when I read your stuff I feel like you have the emotion there..the topic is good...it's not complicated..but something gets lost in the delivery..

Maybe you can play around with the arrangement of the lines more...cause your structure can get a lil choppy...I see you like to flow...so watch your sentences...sometimes they might need to be shortened to improve the flow

it's basically a puzzle...you've got the pieces...and I think you have the ability to create a very unique picture.

felt.... :yes: