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SupremeCee
04-29-06, 05:06 AM
up the fire escape feeling winded
the depth of my hate never comprehended
by those who blissfully livin out their lives
on the streets below this random high rise
get to the top barely makin a sound
check out the four corners no people around
move to the edge look down on the city
i give it no pity cuz it wouldn't admit me

like ants running aimless / worthless lives, like mine
i assemble my rifle / and i'm taking my time
loaded full of dope / hot clear fluid
attach the scope / then i peer through it
at people getting on the train
or going about they business
i'm bouts to splatter they brains
let the world be my witness

on the sidewalk / walking they dogs
in and out of shops / dollars are they gods
its a holiday here / so flags are flying
if you a patriot / then its a good day for dying
*buck* *buck* *buck* / watch all dem scurry
in every direction / blood sprays like snow flurries
grandmas annoy me / *buck* bye-bye ya old cunt
shot a kid in a wheelchair / to liven up the hunt

people haven't a clue / the bullets like rain
drop from my perch / and go against the grain
of skin and muscle and bone tissue too
if you were here too / i'd put one through you
one after another they fall to the street
even a mother / her infant drops to the concrete
i'll fall on my sword / and put one in my dome
hold up lord / got another 1000 rounds until i go home...

Wordsmyth
05-01-06, 10:47 AM
Creative topic, like the title...it's kind of what made me read this.

I giggled at some parts like.

*buck* *buck* *buck* / watch all dem scurry
in every direction / blood sprays like snow flurries
grandmas annoy me / *buck* bye-bye ya old cunt
shot a kid in a wheelchair / to liven up the hunt

The rhyme scheme was kinda simple at some points but it was aight overall.

SupremeCee
05-02-06, 07:32 AM
thanx for the feedback... i agree. if i re-read this and took some time to polish it i could probably clear four stars (those stars should be mics by the way) but its a labor of love more than one of natural talent. cheers, stay up (your alias sounds way too familiar to have under 200 posts... what gives?)

Wordsmyth
05-02-06, 11:20 AM
thanx for the feedback... i agree. if i re-read this and took some time to polish it i could probably clear four stars (those stars should be mics by the way) but its a labor of love more than one of natural talent. cheers, stay up (your alias sounds way too familiar to have under 200 posts... what gives?)

There's a Wordswrath around here somewhere but I'm fairly new to Sohh...

J. Frost
05-08-06, 03:01 PM
some cats don't have a clue man this **** aight right here

yaga
05-15-06, 03:00 AM
LOL, wow. This was heartless creativity. Thanks for dropping this because i swear to God, i've thought the same exact thing. Though i never got it to fruition. The victims were well selected. The scene in the beginning was great. Well described, man. Great image.

Truthfully, i think this is a classic piece. Should be upped or something. lol, seriously. Not because i'm a nut like you but because it's captivating, descriptive and has honest expression in it.

Thanks.