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ILL_FAM
04-20-06, 08:01 PM
i was walking down the streets lit a blunt
aint no front i was there to start a cunt
none of that bullsh1t lo stressing little kids
outta my window dam near took his head of
with the air rifle he speaks the tifle with
crap delightful makes me so spiteful thatz
why no-one like u but then i look around
to check his face little mutherfuker look
just like tony i pull a knife on this foney
mutherfuker ow me money kinda funny too
cause i really hate this kid he a hardhitter
he a leg slipper little homo been god given
anyway so i jack this fool acting all cool
then i seen him at school, i question him
so do u wanna do another deal and he say
sure i ow u money still, i say wait i flanked u
for it yesterday, nah dude trust me id remember
u buster ah, and i said, u little mutherfuker i
straped the wrong suker so i whoop him there
stole his money and put him in the dumbster,
he was lookin for it been stressing me for years
that little queer, sh1t wait a car pulling from the rear,
hey you, i turn and look its the kid i whopped
and his pops looking real mad i strapped my bodypad
im thinking this is gonna get ugly he gonna slug me
so we wait and i here, so u think u hard, i pull out
my tongue and say no u retard, stupidly i knew that
it would cause confrontation i didn't care i roasted the blunt
in the air and of course i was dark so i couldn't see the gun
he says u dam near killed my son look i aint the one
well lights out now cause my job has been done i fall
from a frosen position and im now free of all serenity
all because of mistaken identity

Crayon Flux
04-23-06, 03:27 AM
i was walking down the streets lit a blunt

PAUSE!

Never ever start your verse with no "I was walking down the street" type Mother Goose rhyme. That's some old 2 Live Crew sh!t right there, and they even used it for comedic purposes. It makes people think you're walking down the streets of NEW JACK CITY!

Your rhymes are hard, son - I'll give you that. But where's the sincerity, man? Ain't nobody believing your story but your mistaken identity.

Tell me a story that happened to you from another angle. I'm not saying this story isn't real, you could be a gang-banger for all I know. But for god sakes make it entertaining and [Grandmaster Flash]F-R-E-S-H![/Scratches]

Irish-dipstick
04-23-06, 02:11 PM
shh....it sh!t

ILL_FAM
04-23-06, 02:14 PM
ok hommie good reply thanks for it and all but....

i aint no gang-banger dammit!

im just being real nothing fantastic just truth