Untitled....The Black Dress

[sexydeltagirl]

It caught my eye way before I approached it..
Just hanging there....
Not distrubing a soul...
Other shoppers were checking it out...
But none of them dared to touch it....
It radiated this signal straight to my body..
It was calling my name...
So I moved towards it...
Taking little steps not to cause attention...
And when I reached it the material....
Damn that material....
Soft to the touch..it stretched just a little bit in the front...
I would need the additional support..
So I carefully pulled it down from the rack...
And for a brief second I thought I heard it say....
Hi, my name is seduction what's yours...
But it was my mind playing tricks on me...
It was Susan the store clerk asking if I needed a room....
I thought to myself, could I be alone with this...
Could I handle the person I would turn into....
The Seductress....
So I hesitated just a bit yet convinced myself...
That it was just a dress...
Right!
So I followed behind Susan as she led me down the hallway...
To a small room in the corner...
We were alone....
It seemed like it laughed as I took off my jeans and t-shirt...
"Like woman why do you cover your lovely body in such garments"...
And as I slide my body into this creation....
I heard whistles and "hey baby's"....
I invisioned....
My date blocking my path as I walked in the party...
"You are attracting too much attention" he says...
The sensation it is gave me was amazing...
I twirled and spun myself around.....
Pretended it was a strong breeze coming and rested my hands on my knees...
Trying to keep from exposing my g-string....
We were a match...
We belonged together...
And as I danced the night away...
I, for a quick second was no longer T...
But the owner of "the dress"....

[Walt Frazier]

so this is how you get down outside of TLR?

smh

[sexydeltagirl]

so this is how you get down outside of TLR?

smh

:laugh:

[Con FusIon]

hmmm... I had to check this out a few times before I could figured out what to say. Here it goes:

When I first started reading this, I thought the dress was a metaphor for something, and I was actually looking forward to the end. As made my way through the poem, I realized that the dress wasn't a metaphor; and, in all honesty, that made me stop reading it. I tried again a few times but couldnt get through it until just now. I'm just being honest.

It's clear that you're just kinda letting out some thoughts here. There's nothing wrong with that. If you're content with that, then ignore everything else I have to say. The position I hold, though (it's a bit of a contraversial position, I guess -- it solicts very angry responses from people) is that poetry is about letting your emotions out in an interesting way. Now, that doesn't necessarily mean you need to use fancier words or make it rhyme or anything like that... it just means that a poem, by definition, should be engaging (which is why we have words like "poetic"). Needless to say, I wasn't engaged. But, again, that's my opinion. Someone else may think differently... and I'm sure someone else does.

[sexydeltagirl]

hmmm... I had to check this out a few times before I could figured out what to say. Here it goes:

When I first started reading this, I thought the dress was a metaphor for something, and I was actually looking forward to the end. As made my way through the poem, I realized that the dress wasn't a metaphor; and, in all honesty, that made me stop reading it. I tried again a few times but couldnt get through it until just now. I'm just being honest.

It's clear that you're just kinda letting out some thoughts here. There's nothing wrong with that. If you're content with that, then ignore everything else I have to say. The position I hold, though (it's a bit of a contraversial position, I guess -- it solicts very angry responses from people) is that poetry is about letting your emotions out in an interesting way. Now, that doesn't necessarily mean you need to use fancier words or make it rhyme or anything like that... it just means that a poem, by definition, should be engaging (which is why we have words like "poetic"). Needless to say, I wasn't engaged. But, again, that's my opinion. Someone else may think differently... and I'm sure someone else does.

Hey thanks for trying to read this joint.....I'm apologize if this didn't enage you...Our style of writing may be different but I write what comes from my heart whether you call it a poetry or not...And like you said someone else may think diff. and that to me is the beauty of writing....Everyone is not going to find your poems interesting or engaging but I only can only write what I feel.....which to me is exactly what poetry is.....


Thanks for your comments..... :)

[Con FusIon]

Cool -- I completely understand and respect that. My response wasn't mean to be an attack, so I hope you didn't take it that way. I'll keep checking your joints out. ;)

[sexydeltagirl]

Cool -- I completely understand and respect that. My response wasn't mean to be an attack, so I hope you didn't take it that way. I'll keep checking your joints out. ;)

I didn't take it as such....I respect your opinion and I welcome it actually....I just wanted to express my feelings on what poetry is to me.....I'll be checking for your joints as well.... :)