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ILLyod Lyn
03-19-06, 06:41 PM
Sh!t, I won't get a seat this time.
8:15 a.m. and the crowd is gathering waiting like me.
I am tired of three piece ill-fitted suites with sports socks and tan colored pea coats that all look the same,
the nauseating smell of Starbucks Coffee and mp3 players that I could have sworn are personal that are blaring in my ears anything from The Eagles to Lil' John and all of his friends,
What a fvcking talent he is!
Looking around at this pool of faces makes my head swim,
Makes my palms sweat,
It makes my eyes water!
The deafening sound of heavy friction, and metal tracks comes it grows it swells in my ears and breaks my blank stare at a lady with blue mittens and a multi-colored knitted hat.
As I suspected,
Yes it's mine!
The red line always comes right when i get up the stairs,
I have a special knack for catching public transportation veery seldom do I wait.
Boy if I had a dollar for every time it happened I would have a chauffer by now.
"Doors closing"
Maybe I wish i had an mp3 player so I could tune that out,
So I couldn't hear "Mrs. Business Woman" on the phone next to me talking on her cell to one of her friends about how Ryan got sh!t-faced again with all his buddies and came home late.
Who gives a rat's ass?
If I had an mp3 player though I wouldn't waste precious space on disposable music that goes out of style just as fast as gum looses it's flavor.
Oh no!
I would be the owner of classic timeless music unmarked by fads because I am anti-pop.
The man in front of me with black slicked back hair and porcelain skin didn't notice when it happened but one of my feathers flew out of my jacket and landed directly onto his black scarf,
And then another....
And then another,
If I could just shift my weight and turn a bit to the right in this super tiny space I have he won't notice it and then declare me as the culprit once he spots the hole in my jacket on the right sleeve directly on the embroidery.
But then I would have to owrry about Miss Prissy, with her tweed pink coat and matching pink scarf noticing it.
I can't allow that, I would rather turn to the man with the mullet and the lumberjack jumpsuit, as unsightly as his appearance is to my eyes Miss Prissy might find me just as displeasing.
He might find me to be immensely sophisticated and attractive though!
So I will be his eye candy.
I know he will appreciate my attempt to look half way descent by putting on a bit of lip gloss.
I want to hold my breath,
I don't feel it is fresh,
I usually brush my teeth for longer but this morning I didn't have time I had to cut my five minute extravaganza all the way down to two and a half!
Lumberjack might notice I didn't brush as long,
I can feel his breath on the side of my cheek,
I can hear his chest heaving.
Maybe I am breathing just as loud.
"This is fullerton, transfer to brown line trains at fullerton"
Damnit this is my stop,
I gotta find how to push my way out of here.

homeyjay
03-20-06, 10:44 AM
Sh!t, I won't get a seat this time.
8:15 a.m. and the crowd is gathering waiting like me.
I am tired of three piece ill-fitted suites with sports socks and tan colored pea coats that all look the same,
the nauseating smell of Starbucks Coffee and mp3 players that I could have sworn are personal that are blaring in my ears anything from The Eagles to Lil' John and all of his friends,
What a fvcking talent he is!
Looking around at this pool of faces makes my head swim,
Makes my palms sweat,
It makes my eyes water!
The deafening sound of heavy friction, and metal tracks comes it grows it swells in my ears and breaks my blank stare at a lady with blue mittens and a multi-colored knitted hat.
As I suspected,
Yes it's mine!
The red line always comes right when i get up the stairs,
I have a special knack for catching public transportation veery seldom do I wait.
Boy if I had a dollar for every time it happened I would have a chauffer by now.
"Doors closing"
Maybe I wish i had an mp3 player so I could tune that out,
So I couldn't hear "Mrs. Business Woman" on the phone next to me talking on her cell to one of her friends about how Ryan got sh!t-faced again with all his buddies and came home late.
Who gives a rat's ass?
If I had an mp3 player though I wouldn't waste precious space on disposable music that goes out of style just as fast as gum looses it's flavor.
Oh no!
I would be the owner of classic timeless music unmarked by fads because I am anti-pop.
The man in front of me with black slicked back hair and porcelain skin didn't notice when it happened but one of my feathers flew out of my jacket and landed directly onto his black scarf,
And then another....
And then another,
If I could just shift my weight and turn a bit to the right in this super tiny space I have he won't notice it and then declare me as the culprit once he spots the hole in my jacket on the right sleeve directly on the embroidery.
But then I would have to owrry about Miss Prissy, with her tweed pink coat and matching pink scarf noticing it.
I can't allow that, I would rather turn to the man with the mullet and the lumberjack jumpsuit, as unsightly as his appearance is to my eyes Miss Prissy might find me just as displeasing.
He might find me to be immensely sophisticated and attractive though!
So I will be his eye candy.
I know he will appreciate my attempt to look half way descent by putting on a bit of lip gloss.
I want to hold my breath,
I don't feel it is fresh,
I usually brush my teeth for longer but this morning I didn't have time I had to cut my five minute extravaganza all the way down to two and a half!
Lumberjack might notice I didn't brush as long,
I can feel his breath on the side of my cheek,
I can hear his chest heaving.
Maybe I am breathing just as loud.
"This is fullerton, transfer to brown line trains at fullerton"
Damnit this is my stop,
I gotta find how to push my way out of here.

Big ups to this joint - a brother can deffinetly relate to the a.m. commute via public transit and I'm with you on the MP3's and the phone converstaions (the speaker phone users are really the killers) . I'm also from chi town and I've done the green line, the red line and I'm now riding the orange line
I think that the a.m. experience on the cta sort of defines your day sometimes . I also liked the humor in this joint it's nice to read something that's fresh if you will. If you've got the CTA running times down to a science, then I tip my hat to you. Great read hj

Ariel Sharon
03-21-06, 02:49 AM
Ha. Very abstract and unorthodox. At first glance it sounds dilettantish but when you let it soak in it meshes pretty smoothly. Keep it up Butters

ILLyod Lyn
03-22-06, 05:22 PM
Ha. Very abstract and unorthodox. At first glance it sounds dilettantish but when you let it soak in it meshes pretty smoothly. Keep it up Butters


Thanks..... I sometimes like to write things that don't have to be all serious, about love and hard issues... that gets boring after doing it for so long. To sound dilettantish wasn't exactly what I was going for, but I wasn't going for a big beautiful masterpiece of heavy material either. So I suppose it wasn't an accident that it came off that way. I want the reader to have fun sometimes, I mean laugh, If you look in the archives I have plenty of heavy material. I guess I am trying to play with my style. But I am certianly pleased that you enjoyed it! :)

ovb81
03-27-06, 09:26 AM
Sh!t, I won't get a seat this time.
8:15 a.m. and the crowd is gathering waiting like me.
I am tired of three piece ill-fitted suites with sports socks and tan colored pea coats that all look the same,
the nauseating smell of Starbucks Coffee and mp3 players that I could have sworn are personal that are blaring in my ears anything from The Eagles to Lil' John and all of his friends,
What a fvcking talent he is!
Looking around at this pool of faces makes my head swim,
Makes my palms sweat,
It makes my eyes water!
The deafening sound of heavy friction, and metal tracks comes it grows it swells in my ears and breaks my blank stare at a lady with blue mittens and a multi-colored knitted hat.
As I suspected,
Yes it's mine!
The red line always comes right when i get up the stairs,
I have a special knack for catching public transportation veery seldom do I wait.
Boy if I had a dollar for every time it happened I would have a chauffer by now.
"Doors closing"
Maybe I wish i had an mp3 player so I could tune that out,
So I couldn't hear "Mrs. Business Woman" on the phone next to me talking on her cell to one of her friends about how Ryan got sh!t-faced again with all his buddies and came home late.
Who gives a rat's ass?
If I had an mp3 player though I wouldn't waste precious space on disposable music that goes out of style just as fast as gum looses it's flavor.
Oh no!
I would be the owner of classic timeless music unmarked by fads because I am anti-pop.
The man in front of me with black slicked back hair and porcelain skin didn't notice when it happened but one of my feathers flew out of my jacket and landed directly onto his black scarf,
And then another....
And then another,
If I could just shift my weight and turn a bit to the right in this super tiny space I have he won't notice it and then declare me as the culprit once he spots the hole in my jacket on the right sleeve directly on the embroidery.
But then I would have to owrry about Miss Prissy, with her tweed pink coat and matching pink scarf noticing it.
I can't allow that, I would rather turn to the man with the mullet and the lumberjack jumpsuit, as unsightly as his appearance is to my eyes Miss Prissy might find me just as displeasing.
He might find me to be immensely sophisticated and attractive though!
So I will be his eye candy.
I know he will appreciate my attempt to look half way descent by putting on a bit of lip gloss.
I want to hold my breath,
I don't feel it is fresh,
I usually brush my teeth for longer but this morning I didn't have time I had to cut my five minute extravaganza all the way down to two and a half!
Lumberjack might notice I didn't brush as long,
I can feel his breath on the side of my cheek,
I can hear his chest heaving.
Maybe I am breathing just as loud.
"This is fullerton, transfer to brown line trains at fullerton"
Damnit this is my stop,
I gotta find how to push my way out of here.

Bravo...i cant say to much cuz im probably the MP3 guy..im one of john legend's friends...lol however i enjoyed your piece very vivid..it brought about a clear picture of how public transit is.. and dont hate on your bubble goose baby.. Feathers are a way of life in the North