lifting the bar.

[Irish-dipstick]

i'm lifting the bar am lifting the mic am lifting b!tches
I'm right and i'm fcuking up sn!tches/ tell on me it'll be ur last
first to bomb will be first to blast first to run is first to break
u the one who told u the snake i bake u like cake then i eat
that was good now b!tch do a booty shake while u naked/
till i come again i'm leeting this hold me a known really not g
on a crime spree the only caps on the floor are the ones at ur knees
u beeg please please please i say get on ur knees oh yeah there gone/
i puff smoke smoke bong am hairy and fat call me king kong or king thong
u right i'm right so who wrong u strange u in my range i fire i bust u like
a tire u wired/ u off ur top u the kinda guy who fights his hommies
u the kind u axed little ladies u crazy u nuts u fcuk u just mad
cause u went to jail and got stuck/ quess itz not u month or year
or watever it was why would u kill cause u kill that because... u lost
ur virginity in jail u out on bail but u going back cause u were caught
on camera when u stad the little girl and u ran out of the shop u just jacked.... u a wanted man and thatz fact.

[r-e-mix]

sorry n1gga....but you blew it....i hated it

[theman080]

sorry n1gga....but you blew it....i hated it

chill out, you should drop sumtin new

[Irish-dipstick]

sorry n1gga....but you blew it....i hated it

u still a certified gangsta i thought u was dead i haven't seen u in a while.

ok lo i repct ur opinion.

[r-e-mix]

yeah....i retired....but im comin back from the dead(lol)....and actually i do got sumthin new to drop 080...i been workin on a remix to the song Hail Mary by Makaveli.... i guess i'll drop it for you

[Wordsmyth]

i'm lifting the bar am lifting the mic am lifting b!tches
I'm right and i'm fcuking up sn!tches/ tell on me it'll be ur last
first to bomb will be first to blast first to run is first to break
u the one who told u the snake i bake u like cake then i eat
that was good now b!tch do a booty shake while u naked/
till i come again i'm leeting this hold me a known really not g
on a crime spree the only caps on the floor are the ones at ur knees
u beeg please please please i say get on ur knees oh yeah there gone/
i puff smoke smoke bong am hairy and fat call me king kong or king thong
u right i'm right so who wrong u strange u in my range i fire i bust u like
a tire u wired/ u off ur top u the kinda guy who fights his hommies
u the kind u axed little ladies u crazy u nuts u fcuk u just mad
cause u went to jail and got stuck/ quess itz not u month or year
or watever it was why would u kill cause u kill that because... u lost
ur virginity in jail u out on bail but u going back cause u were caught
on camera when u stad the little girl and u ran out of the shop u just jacked.... u a wanted man and thatz fact.

The Good:

I see you working on the I'm instead of am which helps
I see some attempts at word play like the knee caps line....keep working on it cause you could have turned a few good punchlines with a little more thought.
Bars were structured well and easy to read...which is an improvement

What needs work:

Some of the lines didn't make a whole lot of since to me, seems like your trying to force your rhymes out to quickly. Read the joints over a few times before you post them. You may find you can cut some words out so that it doesn't sound so stretched or better ways to pharse them which will also help with your flow.
Last I didn't see really any sort of topic unless this was just a freestyle, but I was expecting to see something having to do with your title.
Figure out what it is you wanna say, THEN find the words to say them as creativley as possible.

Overall not the best work lyrically but your going in the right direction in other areas of textin. Put it all together and you will elevate. Keep writing.

-ghost-

[Irish-dipstick]

The Good:

I see you working on the I'm instead of am which helps
I see some attempts at word play like the knee caps line....keep working on it cause you could have turned a few good punchlines with a little more thought.
Bars were structured well and easy to read...which is an improvement

What needs work:

Some of the lines didn't make a whole lot of since to me, seems like your trying to force your rhymes out to quickly. Read the joints over a few times before you post them. You may find you can cut some words out so that it doesn't sound so stretched or better ways to pharse them which will also help with your flow.
Last I didn't see really any sort of topic unless this was just a freestyle, but I was expecting to see something having to do with your title.
Figure out what it is you wanna say, THEN find the words to say them as creativley as possible.

Overall not the best work lyrically but your going in the right direction in other areas of textin. Put it all together and you will elevate. Keep writing.

-ghost-

thanxz for the critism and help can't wait for your next drop.