Open Mic Recital

[theman080]

I launch typical tactics that rack mythical backflips
And act as miserable fashion when tagged to physical actions
I'm laughin...can't stop TheMan's hot, demand props
I land shots that tan drops with grand crops...
I move hate at these lames and aim smooth game at their frame
Catz brandishin flow, but if it aint duplicated it's plain
Come on, I'm heavy killer open mic setting pillars
The life threatning iller through the net like Reggie Miller
It's Cold War arsenal while I fold more articles
Your arteries to particles I bomb emcees it's horrible
So damn mothafukkas if there's a question in talent
Let me lesson the malace by suggesting you balance
The time your on my dyck to the times your lines is sick
Cuz you aint been up in months so we know what time it is... :laugh:

[Wordsmyth]

I launch typical tactics that rack mythical backflips
And act as miserable fashion when tagged to physical actions
I'm laughin...can't stop TheMan's hot, demand props
I land shots that tan drops with grand crops...
I move hate at these lames and aim smooth game at their frame
Catz brandishin flow, but if it aint duplicated it's plain
Come on, I'm heavy killer open mic setting pillars
The life threatning iller through the net like Reggie Miller
It's Cold War arsenal while I fold more articles
Your arteries to particles I bomb emcees it's horrible
So damn mothafukkas if there's a question in talent
Let me lesson the malace by suggesting you balance
The time your on my dyck to the times your lines is sick
Cuz you aint been up in months so we know what time it is... :laugh:

Oh dam*n, that had everything... good, wordplay, flow, multi's, good healthcare coverage....everything god. Ill spit!

[Reflection 3000]

wack




haha

[Universe]

You have a nice style; multi's are always prevalent. I realize in this piece you were just fooling around, but what I think you need is a little better wordplay in your drops. (This is only a suggestion, your rhymes work fine the way they are.)

But you obviously enjoy the battle aspect of it, so you should adapt accordingly. Multi's can make a battle-type verse hypnotizing, but a well placed play on words along with it is what one should strive for.

I don't know, maybe I'm just talking out of my ass. I'm by no means an expert. But I feel if you're going to reply to something, at least give it some substance... helpful or not.

You decide.

[theman080]

Thanks for the reponses, i was jus fukkin around wioth this one but wordplay has always been my weak point, still workin on it. Anyway, good look.

[r-e-mix]

good piece

[Courtdog]

Thanks for the reponses, i was jus fukkin around wioth this one but wordplay has always been my weak point, still workin on it. Anyway, good look.

Well keep workin on it beeyotch! :smoker: