new style get back at me

[Irish-dipstick]

i shock like static without the killin
am like the irs wit out the billin
am a gangsta but am stil slug fillin
am a thug right to the bones
am a real artist nuthin like a ringtone
on ur weak ass phone statlite headache
i do this for ur sake if am not here
u might find me in the bakery bakin cake
plz itz gotta stop u gotta drop u shot
i got a plot to get rich fcuk a b!tch
and murder a snitch tweak and turn the rite switch
i got inch that i got scartch
so of these sohh peeps call legends and don't match
they just get snatched just don't lie
murder on the side window down itz a drive-by
am so fly can't be touch am so high
am on a gangsta grind wit a murderous
yet heavenly mind and u got no guts
i rip out ur spine u spineless fcuk
u make me sick like in a truck
u as dirty and as bend as chuck
this is deluxe am the crooks
am the own from the park called brooks
i got all faggots shook i hope they get slayed
and i get paid while i persuade am goin on no to my next decade.

[Irish-dipstick]

like lost in a whirlwind me and best friends
most murdered themselves strapped sucide
belts and the sad days come and am broke a true bum
am in a slum but wat can i do get me high
and then get me bury and get my family by
troublesom times trouble wit rhymes
a dipiction of my life wit every line
am outta time that i no increase my do
better my flow am slow but no am up
to speed am here to do gods deed
and bong the weed plant a seed
make a new life wat could be better
i could get iller but i aint gonna sweat her
but u no i could get funky put this is story writin
this is writin bout fightin coliddin and obidin with in
and without a sin wit a gun solute ur style
is dillute u pollute am a cadet of the hood
u aint sh!t don't push me i aint in the mood
there i stood watch u die i could have saved u
but i warned u not to fcuk wit my crew
i handed u over now u not comein back
u wack and u got jacked by wack i meant attitude
i mean ur a real life fcuked up interlude maybe am
just rude but ur a rube ur a fake u aint cube
and there u stood me diein u did nuthin rememeber
this is pryor but i survived u were in the milddle of the drive
seein u ride no u collide and no u die.

^^^
i hope u'll no this is the trest sh!t i ever wrote plz quote.

[Wordsmyth]

Irish..... yo. First off when referring to yourself it's not "am" it's "I'm" which is short for I-am or I-will... really it's I-am but you get the point. Respect for the efforts duke you have hung in there like a champ, keep trying yo you got mad heart. If I'm not mistaking I think I saw you say there was a language barrier. But yet and still broaden your vocabulary a little and use words that are not commonly used to express yourself. Your flow is decent but your rhymes are mad basic, find a topic that moves you an just close your eyes and spit dude...If gangsta is not who you are then don't go there it's not a good look unless you can really talk some true and real ****. It's obvious you want to improve and be apart of the community so just take my advice........... keep writing....you'll get there..


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[Irish-dipstick]

i respect ur opinon but i like to do this fast so i can't exactly stop and check my words. but the reason i use 'am' is because thatz text language and i like to use that from time to time but i know wat ur saying.

peace.

[Wordsmyth]

i respect ur opinon but i like to do this fast so i can't exactly stop and check my words. but the reason i use 'am' is because thatz text language and i like to use that from time to time but i know wat ur saying.

peace.

That's cool, it's just kinda hard to follow in text sometimes the ish throws me off. I suggest um rather than am, but DO YOU god...

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[Irish-dipstick]

That's cool, it's just kinda hard to follow in text sometimes the ish throws me off. I suggest um rather than am, but DO YOU god...

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lol i got u thanxz for the advice lo.