the man that loved you...

[Cerebral Knievel]

honestly..
I don't care where my heart steers to
as long as I can see "us"
fading in the rearview
tore up my maps
and burned the scraps
of love I had since
I've finally seen the light
and "my" future
is "us"...past tense
your absence
from my first,
second
and
third eyes
left my love
blind
and
weak enough to be
toppled
by
one
word....
"why?"...why
I begged
for things you should have just given
I stayed in and died
while you were out living
I...
I...
I'm tired
I'm tired of forgiveness
I'm tired of asking you why the f*ck you did this
I'm tired...
I'm tired of you.
I can't make you see
all of the greatness you possess
I can't treat you like a queen if you choose to be seen
...as something less
I can't...I can't go on
this is too long
sorry if I bugged you..
good bye and all my best...
signed:
The man that loved you.

[7:30femmefatale]

if this is based on something real life... she ain't sh*t.

[Courtdog]

if this is based on something real life... she ain't sh*t.

If this is based on real life?


Wow.... women :dry:

[byrdman84]

to be frank, thats hot dog :yes:
thats some realness right there

[sexydeltagirl]

Damn CK,

That made me feel bad, your writing bring back memories....
This inspired, me to finish..."I fvked up"

Thanks for the inspiration....

[slave2aplaya]

Real deep, I loved it.

[Dmac]

dat was it man
dat was hot on da real

[7:30femmefatale]

dat was it man
dat was hot on da real
scorchin hot

[Cerebral Knievel]

Thank you all.

Some poems are written, and some poems explode from your soul. Form yields to emotion when your heart lashes out in that fashion, and you can only hope that others can identify the message in the mess that spills from your pen when you are arrogant enough to try and....trap....emotion that powerful in a fragile cage of ink and paper...some moments are not meant to be captured as they happen. I'm glad I was able to channel a fraction of that energy into these words..

thank you again for you comments.

[ovb81]

wow great piece sir and this line right here " don't care where my heart steers toas long as I can see "us"fading in the rearview" thats fire !!!

[TRIPLE THREAT]

honestly..
I don't care where my heart steers to
as long as I can see "us"
fading in the rearview
tore up my maps
and burned the scraps
of love I had since
I've finally seen the light
and "my" future
is "us"...past tense
your absence
from my first,
second
and
third eyes
left my love
blind
and
weak enough to be
toppled
by
one
word....
"why?"...why
I begged
for things you should have just given
I stayed in and died
while you were out living
I...
I...
I'm tired
I'm tired of forgiveness
I'm tired of asking you why the f*ck you did this
I'm tired...
I'm tired of you.
I can't make you see
all of the greatness you possess
I can't treat you like a queen if you choose to be seen
...as something less
I can't...I can't go on
this is too long
sorry if I bugged you..
good bye and all my best...
signed:
The man that loved you.


Damn mann, ufck her, she aint right she aint right

:sad: 3 nines my nic :violent: :violent: :violent: