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sexydeltagirl
12-14-05, 10:39 PM
I saw you with her eventhough you didn't see me...
You 2 looked happy so in love I assumed...
You touched her cheek looked deep into her eyes and mouthed the words I love you...
Just like you did me..that day in July on the park bench with our hands intertwined....
The birds were singing....my throat was in need of some water, cause it was hot and it gets dry when I'm nervous...
You had on that shirt that I brought you with the jockey on the side and your skin smelled of a strong oil that I could smell even when you were not around...
We were in love..
I sit in my car and watch, the sound of the cars and the hustle and bustle of rush hour cease to exists....
You are eating your favorite dish, a burger and fries...She is eating what seems like a salad....she's petite so I guess she's on a diet..
But you loved that I loved to eat and wasn't shy...
You're talking she's laughing and blushing...I bet I know what you just said..
Something along the lines of "the sun is jealous of you right now, cause you are outshinning it, you are glowing baby"...
I turn away cause my emotions are getting the best of me....I never wanted to see this day, the day in which you move on...
I wanted you to be lonely forever turn your back on love again...Believing that the love we had can never be had again, so why type her number in your nextel...
But I knew this day would come cause change is constant...
Please don't kiss her.....like you kissed me pretend like you are giving me a sample of your food but instead of a fork our lips became joined...
One falls....A tear...
I didn't expect it, I couldn't reject it...I am...... (gasp)
I turn the key in the ignition and prepare to leave...
But not before I press my hand against my heart and tell it to beat again....

I saw you with her eventhough you didn't see me.... :sad:

Black N Proud
12-16-05, 03:08 AM
I saw you with her eventhough you didn't see me...
You 2 looked happy so in love I assumed...
You touched her cheek looked deep into her eyes and mouthed the words I love you...
Just like you did me..that day in July on the park bench with our hands intertwined....
The birds were singing....my throat was in need of some water, cause it was hot and it gets dry when I'm nervous...
You had on that shirt that I brought you with the jockey on the side and your skin smelled of a strong oil that I could smell even when you were not around...
We were in love..
I sit in my car and watch, the sound of the cars and the hustle and bustle of rush hour cease to exists....
You are eating your favorite dish, a burger and fries...She is eating what seems like a salad....she's petite so I guess she's on a diet..
But you loved that I loved to eat and wasn't shy...
You're talking she's laughing and blushing...I bet I know what you just said..
Something along the lines of "the sun is jealous of you right now, cause you are outshinning it, you are glowing baby"...
I turn away cause my emotions are getting the best of me....I never wanted to see this day, the day in which you move on...
I wanted you to be lonely forever turn your back on love again...Believing that the love we had can never be had again, so why type her number in your nextel...
But I knew this day would come cause change is constant...
Please don't kiss her.....like you kissed me pretend like you are giving me a sample of your food but instead of a fork our lips became joined...
One falls....A tear...
I didn't expect it, I couldn't reject it...I am...... (gasp)
I turn the key in the ignition and prepare to leave...
But not before I press my hand against my heart and tell it to beat again....

I saw you with her eventhough you didn't see me.... :sad:
This is a really, really deep poem!!! The way you express the emotions and feelings throughout the poem are just amazing! With all of your work, you always seem to make whatever is happening or taken place, so visible and clear. Your work is truly something powerful!!! You are a natural when it comes to writing, it just seems to flow so perfectly...

It's truly a work of art!!! :blush:

sexydeltagirl
12-16-05, 01:12 PM
This is a really, really deep poem!!! The way you express the emotions and feelings throughout the poem are just amazing! With all of your work, you always seem to make whatever is happening or taken place, so visible and clear. Your work is truly something powerful!!! You are a natural when it comes to writing, it just seems to flow so perfectly...

It's truly a work of art!!! :blush:

Thanks so much for the feedback...I really feel like I see these words when I write them, every poem in my mind I can visualize....I really think it's a gift...

Thanks for appreciating my work, it means a lot to me really.... :blush:

Black N Proud
12-17-05, 01:17 PM
Thanks so much for the feedback...I really feel like I see these words when I write them, every poem in my mind I can visualize....I really think it's a gift...

Thanks for appreciating my work, it means a lot to me really.... :blush:
You welcome.. :blush: