Can I live?

[Stillmatic22]

spit over Jayz's can I live instrumental


im trying stay focused at the task at hand
tackle the plan from a gram to grand
understand i got bigger schemes
guns with laser beams..... bang!
one shot will leave your brain where your hoody hang
thats on everythang, i leave scars
ride a bike on the beat the way i handle bars
ima star in the hood yous a clown whats good
you would if you could spit like me
throw hands and youd wanta fight me
but the beef im built for it street or wax
cats bout as hardcore as a porno on cinemax
so i dont need to think twice and if you live by the knife
you die by the gun fuk is you dumb
dont make me TERROR your SQUAD like big pun

[Enlil]

I see what you're doin. I only read this piece of yours but I have a suggestion. There's something called quatrains in writing which goes in hand with 4 bars of a beat. It helps you flow better and makes the repetition easy and fluid. It seems you change rhyme scheme every 2 bars. Try changing at every four. After that as it evolves it'll get more complex. Try it by four first.

Look forward to readin more mang...