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MOREOVER
11-16-05, 11:02 PM
sometimes I wish
it would just rain,
I wish I could see the sky cry and the tears roll down the street
to prove to my self
that somethings
and sometimes things
are not as sweet
as they were when you first meet
and greet the world which seemed so unique
like a free jazz beat
or some funny looking feet and toes.
All who speak and suppose
how this story goes, goes to show
that nothing is real
and thats really a steal
and a hell of deal
when you point aim and fire
before you even realize the drill.
Shocked I am when it rains,
or when it had rained
or when anything just aint the same
as it was before.
Im always keeping score..
I know a lose lose situation or a win win
from an optimistic evaluation
I believed in imancipation
from my own long hours of contiplation
and personal frustration
but when does steady concentration
change into having alienation as my destination.
The bigger the headache
the bigger the pill
and before you know it
you know I will
be looking to the sky
searching for my third I,
and before I can even ask my third I,
he'll cry
and I'll know why
it's because the my third eye
knows
no lie.

Ice Cold EX
11-17-05, 12:26 AM
its nice man.good read:thumbsup: could use a lttle punctuation. just to make it easier to understand.

homeyjay
11-18-05, 12:14 PM
sometimes I wish
it would just rain,
I wish I could see the sky cry and the tears roll down the street
to prove to my self
that somethings
and sometimes things
are not as sweet
as they were when you first meet
and greet the world which seemed so unique
like a free jazz beat
or some funny looking feet and toes.
All who speak and suppose
how this story goes, goes to show
that nothing is real
and thats really a steal
and a hell of deal
when you point aim and fire
before you even realize the drill.
Shocked I am when it rains,
or when it had rained
or when anything just aint the same
as it was before.
Im always keeping score..
I know a lose lose situation or a win win
from an optimistic evaluation
I believed in imancipation
from my own long hours of contiplation
and personal frustration
but when does steady concentration
change into having alienation as my destination.
The bigger the headache
the bigger the pill
and before you know it
you know I will
be looking to the sky
searching for my third I,
and before I can even ask my third I,
he'll cry
and I'll know why
it's because the my third eye
knows
no lie.

Hey, I reread this a couple of times and I like the flow, very thought provokin good read my brother keep keepin' on.

MOREOVER
11-18-05, 02:51 PM
Hey, I reread this a couple of times and I like the flow, very thought provokin good read my brother keep keepin' on.


thanks man.. I appreicate you reading and sharing your thoughts. Peace!