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Absolut da poet
08-25-04, 09:32 AM
don't worry it reads fast holla



I tried
by Absolut

I've seen these tears before
falling backwards from a time & place of pain
in a pool of thought where we began I saw back then
a future of joy..not but a few suns from this day
where you took me with your resilience of having your way

I tried..

but was denied full entry here between these walls
where the memory paints the sky I could see you & I
as we moved in sync..like the wind about the clouds
you wisked my mind until my time was spent in the constant push

I tried..

to vent this like how it rains so hard from inside of me
in these days of change some things stay the same
and now how you've pictured me still I am
between these frames
so torn..how I feel you from tearing me
in thoughts
these parts bleed no longer pieces of my heart
impulsive I rushed from the start to the end
where I thought we'd be as together penned forever
could you see our broken circle mend
everything beyond this X-mas past
could you do this math with me
where in 5 days our eve became the day you left alone
me..praying in this new year for you

I just...
with everything as such..(sighs)
Tried..

as it withered like everything I touch
that dies you know the reaches of my pride I couldn't just
apologize
and now I'm only big enough
so grown that now I'm only giving up
Tomorrow for eternal highs
yesterdays for goodbyes
I wonder if..these days bring true a wish..will you ever miss
me..other than this
the long we'll never kiss
like a father to this bastard "Love" sometimes I think it doesn't exist
Or maybe I wanna pretend it never did..myself
and so convinced
in my eternal reflection I became a hollow man
my feelings disappeared
only now can I see this backwards reality turn around
but I don't know where to go from here..

thanoblepimp
09-19-04, 10:33 PM
dope , I really liked it keep up the dopeneZz...





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dj_flip_out
09-20-04, 01:02 PM
[QUOTE=Absolut da poet]don't worry it reads fast holla


Absolut,

This is a great piece explaining your truest feelings. I assume that you are or where going through a rough break up where you just didnt want to say goodbye.
For myself this hits home, because like this piece I have had trouble saying goodbye to a love that I destroyed on my own will, and now she is with another, and Im left fighting these feelings as I wake up to another woman.

Great work, Flip
I tried


"I've seen these tears before
falling backwards from a time & place of pain
in a pool of thought where we began I saw back then
a future of joy..not but a few suns from this day
where you took me with your resilience of having your way

I tried.."

Absolut da poet
09-24-04, 02:27 AM
Thanks y'all
Ruk inspired me to go back 2 my old style so I figured I'd give it a go and see how it turns out I dunno I've got some other sh1t but I'm really not 2 sure about how it comes off..

groupie destroyer
09-25-04, 08:21 PM
nice poem man.......very moving,vivid.nice language

keep it up........very enjoyable to read!

damn,i gotta write some poems lol...

peace

Absolut da poet
09-26-04, 05:36 PM
nice poem man.......very moving,vivid.nice language

keep it up........very enjoyable to read!

damn,i gotta write some poems lol...

peace

Lol thanks

pryncess31400
09-28-04, 01:14 PM
...i love reading your poems...my mind totally shuts down and i can see the words...they have movement and flow...it's just really cool, keep doing what you do...

Abs_inth da prophet
04-24-07, 02:57 PM
up..

I'm bored..lol

ROB-BROWN
04-25-07, 12:28 AM
some of the best poetry ive read in the poetry corner keep it up...

Abs_inth da prophet
04-25-07, 11:19 AM
some of the best poetry ive read in the poetry corner keep it up...

thanks...

'preciate it..