She's So Good to Me

[DomCorleone]

Hey guys, this is my first song please let me know what you think.

http://www.zshare.net/download/51844859b79218cd/

[Sicilian Spit]

I peeped it. I thought it had promise overall. You got a good voice, reminds me of Lloyd Banks lightweight. The beat is nice, and I actually liked the parts in between the verses where you were talkin about her. Good change of pace.

But, I wasn't really feelin the verses. The content was cool, I'm not knockin that. The delivery was a bit off at times and the rhyme scheme too simple (the 'bad like good not bad like bad' part especially). I mean the track sounded pretty good overall, but sometimes the off-beat delivery and the lack of rhyming distracted from that sound. I would say with this track, in terms of the lyrics, make them even more simple but on point with the delivery and rhyming, or go hard and make the lyrics the focal point.

What I try to do is make sure that each line has something sick about it. So either it has a pun, or a metaphor, or a simile, or each word in the line rhymes, or something like that. Check out my Cane Forest joint in the main room.

Anyways, keep goin man, you got promise, just need to hone the rhyme skills a bit.

[DomCorleone]

thanks man for the feedback I appreciate it, I will def check you out, no homo lol