Swag V Sampler & New Track

[theman080]

sampler: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=390960&songID=6982551

track: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=390960&songID=6982561

feed welcomed and appreciated

[Truelyrics]

not bad...best part by far is when

starts with "..why you think I carry the belt?" from that through "...blazin' ya flesh"



was fire and where you need to have the rest of your rhymes.

That "current version" part could have been SO f..ing hot. You were killin' it off then cut off the rhyme scheme too early.

"the competitor.." part was an example of when you carried it off better.

As you spit more you'll realize that you gotta structure your writtens a little different. Plus wut seems simplistic through text can come off real good in vocals.

For example think about BIG's Unbelievable. Nothing complex at all but comes off hot as hell.

[Sicilian Spit]

Word what dude said about simplifying sh*t a little bit for vocals. There were some hot lines here, but the delivery is a little off in places, and overall it sounds extra distorted. No doubting you a good lyricist, but the mic skills got a way to go.